For the successful development of a country, it is more important for the government to spend money on the education of very young children than to spend money on universities.
It goes without saying that in this sophisticated era when we live, people have to keep pace with the ever-changing life. In this regard, while some people hold the view that governments should allocate money on universities to be developed, other stay at the end of a continuum and assert that young children should be educated by spending more money on them. As far as I am concerned, the universities have a priority in order to be contributed money by governments because not only do the university students need more money to do their researches, but they also are more knowledgeable and need money to a device many innovative notions. In the following. I will elaborate on my reasons.
First and foremost, by allocating money on universities, the students can do researches with better equipment. To be more specific, when they want to figure out the best methods to do experiments, they need more money in order to examine different ways. Furthermore, there are other ways like going to scientific trips or museums which cost money, and the university should support it. Consequently, the more the university has money to spend, the more qualified and educated the students to become. Take my personal experience as an example. I remember when I was studying undergraduate degree, and took a course about dams. Although I studied a lot, and read many papers about different kind of dams, I needed to see them by myself. I tried many different ways to be allowed to go and look at them, but they told me that you should go by the universities' tour. Afterward, I spoke with the administering office of the university and my professor, but they told me that there is no enough budget to spend. In fact, had the governments contributed more budget for students to support their trips, we could have been able to understand our lessons better by watching them lively.
To begin with last but not least, more money should be spent on universities because a lot of talented students need money in order to invent and discover many new phenomena. For more clarification, not having a job and salary, students have to rely on the universities’ budget to invent and create innovative materials. On the other hand, if they work in order to earn money, they will not have enough times to invent. An example of my personal life can drive this notion home. For my master thesis, I invent a new method due to solve the problems of the water distribution network in my city. My supervisor and professors told me that my work is one of the beneficial works which should be experimented to erect it as the real case study. At first, my university did not have any more budget to spend on my work, so, I could not model it as a sample. After two years, they accepted to give me enough money to make my sample. Having built my model, my city could use it in the real case and one aspect of the city water problems could be dealt with.
In conclusion, by taking all the examples and reasons, mentioned previously, into account, the universities should be considered as a place to be allocated money on. This work, lead to prosperous students and works which make the society to improve, and by supported inventions many problems would be solved. To put it another way, who can ignore the positive impact of supporting talented and adept students by spending money for their inventions?
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 743, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...I needed to see them by myself. I tried many different ways to be allowed to go and look at th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, look, so, while, in conclusion, in fact, kind of, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 9.8082437276 214% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 86.0 52.1666666667 165% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2792.0 1977.66487455 141% => OK
No of words: 590.0 407.700716846 145% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73220338983 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.92848004997 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81861094388 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 275.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.466101694915 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 896.4 618.680645161 145% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.3891829803 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.407407407 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8518518519 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.85185185185 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223644598789 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0651759938332 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0750663115688 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159275996612 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0470395241534 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 10.002688172 200% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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