"Of the two leading real estate firms in our town — Adams Realty and Fitch Realty — Adams Realty is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents; in contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago I listed my home with Fitch, and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams Realty."
The writer of a letter has drawn conclusion based on disjoint set of information that Adams Realty is superior over Fitch Realty and if you want to sell your home quickly at better price, you should go to Adams Realty. To support his conclusion, the writer has provided statistical data and his/her own experience. However, there are certain loopholes in the writer's argument and evidence.
Firstly, in the letter, the writer has talked about only two leading real estate firms - Adams Realty and Fitch Realty. Here, the writer had not provided that how many real estate firms are there in the writer's town and on which bases he choose to compare these two real estate to prove his/her claim. Further, the writer compares real estate agents in these two firms and tries to prove that Adams Realty is better choice if you want to sell your house at a good price than Fitch realty. However, the writer failed to establish relation between the number of real estate agents in firm and selling price of home.
Secondly, the writer compares the last year revenue of Adams Realty and Fitch Realty. The writer states that the last year revenue of Adams' was twice as high as that of Fitch. Here, the writer has not provided any information that Adams' and Fitch's Realty are only selling old homes and not in other fields such as construction of new houses. Moreover, the writer suggest that the average price of home sales of Adams Realty is high compared to Fitch Realty, so you should use Adams Realty to sell your house. But, it is not necessary that average price of house sell by Adams' is high so the price of your house will also be high. Furthermore, the writer failed to provide any information about size of houses and area in which houses were located those are sold by Adams' and Fitch's firm.
Finally, the writer claims that homes listed with Adams sell faster than with Fitch's firm. To support his/her claim the writer provide his/her own personal experience. The writer states that ten year ago, it took more than four months to sell; and last year, it took only one month to sell house. There are many flaws in this statement. The demand of house might change over ten years. It may be possible that the demand of houses were fewer ten years ago compared to last year. Furthermore, the size, area and condition of house also different. So it is not good idea to compare those two houses.
In conclusion, the writer failed to support the claim that the Adams Realty is superior to Fitch Realty. The writer has provided unfair comparison of number of real estate agents and his/her own personal experience. In addition, the writer has provided only partial statistical data, which creates doubts in one's mind. Unless these doubts are resolved, it cannot be concluded that Adams Realty is superior to Fitch Realty.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 498 350
No. of Characters: 2270 1500
No. of Different Words: 176 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.724 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.558 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.084 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 153 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 76 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 47 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 22 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.92 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.648 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.64 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.378 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.535 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.196 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 361, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writers'' or 'writer's'?
Suggestion: writers'; writer's
...ver, there are certain loopholes in the writers argument and evidence. Firstly, in...
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Line 3, column 240, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'chooses'.
Suggestion: chooses
... the writers town and on which bases he choose to compare these two real estate to pro...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 310, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...atistical data, which creates doubts in ones mind. Unless these doubts are resolved,...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, in addition, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 28.8173652695 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2342.0 2260.96107784 104% => OK
No of words: 493.0 441.139720559 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75050709939 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71206996034 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.18980159638 2.78398813304 79% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.383367139959 0.468620217663 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 722.7 705.55239521 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 18.0 8.76447105788 205% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.9053404396 57.8364921388 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.68 119.503703932 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.72 23.324526521 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.36 5.70786347227 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.67664670659 235% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.347553365347 0.218282227539 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126526129628 0.0743258471296 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118633068383 0.0701772020484 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233815489872 0.128457276422 182% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0979017271448 0.0628817314937 156% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 14.3799401198 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 12.5979740519 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.88 8.32208582834 83% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 98.500998004 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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