Several recent surveys indicate that home owners are increasingly eager to conserve energy. At the same time, manufacturers are now marketing many home appliances, such as refrigerators and air conditioners, that are almost twice as energy efficient as those sold a decade ago. Also, new technologies for better home insulation and passive solar heating are readily available to reduce the energy needed for home heating. Therefore, the total demand for electricity in our area will not increase — and may decline slightly. Since our three electric generating plants in operation for the past twenty years have always met our needs, construction of new generating plants will not be necessary.
In this argument the writer is predicting whether new electricity generating plants are required to be built. In supporting this statement the author asserts that according to recent surveys, home owners are eager to conserve energy. Hence based on this mere survey, the manufacturing companies are producing and marketing products that may suffice and meet the growing demands of the consumer market. Products like refrigerators, air conditioners, and new technologies for home insulation and solar heating in response to the contingent demand suggested by the survey. As a result the overall demand of electricity will reduce and hence new electric generating plants are not required, according to author. This conclusion certainly has many flaws.
Firstly, the survey is conducted on what number of people is a question. Even if the the survey is conducted on large number of people, do they even use electrical devices that cause high consumption of energy is a question.Author also states that the respondents are eager to conserve energy. While it can be done by using energy efficient devices, but is is certainly possible that they are willing to reduce their usage on their current appliances. Author also doesn't state the place where the survey is conducted, It may be possible the survey is conducted on one part of a country but that may not be applicable to the other part.Hence the author must be resolute about the consumer covered and the place where it is applicable.
Secondly,the author does not take into account the possible increase into population of homeowners or industry is a big flaw in the assertion.Even if the consumption of energy is reduced by half, the population may increase three fold! Considering the industries that have heavy machinery running on high consumption of electrical energy, the author doesn't state companies manufacturing energy efficient industry grade machines and only mentions consumer electronics. It is generally these big industries that require huge amounts of energy. Hence author must mention any advancement in industry grade machines that are energy efficient.
Thirdly, the author posits about new innovation in insulation and solar heating that are energy efficient. But is it even applicable to the place surveyed? What purpose does innovation in solar heating serve in warm places like Dubai? Even if it serves the purpose pertaining to the place no one is going to use it everyday.It would strengthen the author argument if he mentions the place and environment taken into consideration for the purpose.
In sum, the argument has many flaws pertaining mainly to the scope and resolution of the data collected.The argument of author would be bolstered by proofs that tells us more about the kind of people surveyed,the place from where the people belong,their specific interest into buying that product,and most importantly the industries that may incur a huge consumption of energy.
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- Several recent surveys indicate that home owners are increasingly eager to conserve energy. At the same time, manufacturers are now marketing many home appliances, such as refrigerators and air conditioners, that are almost twice as energy efficient as th 49
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 481 350
No. of Characters: 2436 1500
No. of Different Words: 210 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.683 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.064 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.734 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 184 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 131 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 103 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 67 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.316 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.988 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.632 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.317 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.552 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.108 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 235, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...me owners are eager to conserve energy. Hence based on this mere survey, the manufact...
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Line 4, column 83, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...number of people is a question. Even if the the survey is conducted on large number of ...
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Line 4, column 83, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...number of people is a question. Even if the the survey is conducted on large number of ...
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Line 4, column 226, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: Author
...igh consumption of energy is a question.Author also states that the respondents are ea...
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Line 4, column 356, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: is
... by using energy efficient devices, but is is certainly possible that they are willin...
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Line 4, column 467, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
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... their current appliances. Author also doesnt state the place where the survey is con...
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Suggestion: Hence
...may not be applicable to the other part.Hence the author must be resolute about the ...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...may not be applicable to the other part.Hence the author must be resolute about the ...
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Line 4, column 681, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ce the author must be resolute about the consumer covered and the place where it ...
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Line 6, column 10, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: , the
...ace where it is applicable. Secondly,the author does not take into account the p...
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Suggestion: Even
...industry is a big flaw in the assertion.Even if the consumption of energy is reduced...
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...mption of electrical energy, the author doesnt state companies manufacturing energy ef...
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Line 6, column 544, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...es that require huge amounts of energy. Hence author must mention any advancement in ...
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Line 8, column 35, Rule ID: NEW_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'innovation'.
Suggestion: innovation
...t. Thirdly, the author posits about new innovation in insulation and solar heating that ar...
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Line 8, column 237, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[2]
Message: “Even if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...eating serve in warm places like Dubai? Even if it serves the purpose pertaining to the...
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Line 8, column 317, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
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... to the place no one is going to use it everyday.It would strengthen the author argument...
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...lace no one is going to use it everyday.It would strengthen the author argument if...
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Suggestion: The
...pe and resolution of the data collected.The argument of author would be bolstered b...
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...s more about the kind of people surveyed,the place from where the people belong,thei...
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...d,the place from where the people belong,their specific interest into buying that prod...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , and
...ecific interest into buying that product,and most importantly the industries that ma...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, while, kind of, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 55.5748502994 101% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 16.3942115768 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2497.0 2260.96107784 110% => OK
No of words: 470.0 441.139720559 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31276595745 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94946189781 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 204.123752495 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.457446808511 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 801.9 705.55239521 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 111.248748086 57.8364921388 192% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.722222222 119.503703932 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1111111111 23.324526521 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 5.70786347227 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 5.25449101796 400% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.20758483034 171% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168925629117 0.218282227539 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0561346612598 0.0743258471296 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.054549923828 0.0701772020484 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0863665288712 0.128457276422 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0490132376239 0.0628817314937 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 14.3799401198 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 48.3550499002 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.5979740519 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 98.500998004 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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