A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
The worth of a person in the society has changed over the years due to the shift in values. A higher degree of attention is paid on one's social reputation and how valuable of what we own in the modern city compared to virtues. I agree with this opinion to a large extent with the reasons of the rise of consumerism and celebrity worship.
To begin with, living in a consumer driven community is the main cause that contributes to the prevalence of judging others by what they have. The higher living standard enables people to afford buying high-valued goods or even luxurious handbags and designer's branded clothes. they are taken as a symbol of social status which the more you own, the worthier you are. A good illustration of this is that Chinese in general prefer buying them for showing off and feel more privileged, thus, the spending on luxury retail market in China has surpassed all countries.
Meanwhile, celebrities' influence has brought conspicuous impacts. In the digital era, social media platforms such as Facebook and Instagram allow them to spread their messages all over the world. Lavish lifestyles and perfect-matched outfits with good-looking bodies are what these key opinion leaders show to their followers online. To further elaborate on this, the public, especially the young generation will inevitably learn from their role models by posting similar contents and selfies in the exchange of 'likes' and encouraging comments from families and friends. Hence, it is believed that self-esteem of the majority of teenagers are boosted by getting compliments in the virtual world.
To conclude, there is no doubt that the value in judging one's worth has been differentiated from the past when people emphasize more on consumer products and follow the new social standards. Despite the fact that it is a sad truth, this phenomenon will gradually continue under the development of materialism and social media.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to buy'.
Suggestion: to buy
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Suggestion: They
...handbags and designers branded clothes. they are taken as a symbol of social status ...
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Message: Use past participle here: 'surpassed'.
Suggestion: surpassed
...ng on luxury retail market in China has surpass all countries. Meanwhile, celebrit...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ket in China has surpass all countries. Meanwhile, celebrities influence has bro...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... by posting similar contents and selfies in the exchange of likes and encouraging...
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...e is no doubt that the value in judging ones worth has been differentiated from the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, look, so, thus, while, in general, no doubt, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1620.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 317.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11041009464 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73175555853 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.615141955836 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.4802324309 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.714285714 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6428571429 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.92857142857 7.06120827912 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182875369856 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0560192561523 0.084324248473 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0466189772509 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107445190781 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0444906893177 0.056905535591 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.61 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.