Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim AND the reason on which that claim is based.
The given claim suggests that rather than simply being adviced to "follow one's dreams", individuals should be guided to choose worthy goals: the basis of this claim is that many people's dreams are selfish. The implication then is, that selfish goals are not worthy. A discussion is warranted to assess whether selfishness and worthiness of goals are mutually exclusive areas.
Although one's goals are often chosen keeping in mind one's "self-interest", which may be judged "selfish" by some, it should be recognized, that "self-interested" or "selfish" goals need not be unworthy. Dreams followe...
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Sentence: The given claim suggests that rather than simply being adviced to 'follow one's dreams', individuals should be guided to choose worthy goals: the basis of this claim is that many people's dreams are selfish.
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