Describe a person you were a fan of
I myself consider my role model and fan as maria Sharapova .she was a well known Russian tennis player.I made her my role model because of her determination towards her work.she believe that sacrifice and hardwork are the most important things to achieve our goal.For Instance, at such a tender age of three years she left her home in Siberia,russia and went to Florida in USA to get herself professionally trained .she suffered a painful separation from her mother for a period of two years. she could not even meet her father as he remained busy arranging funds for her. Moreover, she was being bullied by her elder classmates. she did not got depressed but she made herself prepare for greater insult in the way to fulfill her dream.
Her mantra of success was to work very hard and to face the toughest competition.Although she was trained in US but she was ready to represent russia in Olympics.This reflects that she loved russia and was proud to be an Russian.Last but not the least,it was her sacrifice and hardwork that she became top seeded women tennis player in world. Hence, the monetary gains and the fame incurred by maria are well deserving.
In conclusion,everything is possible and every dream can be turn into reality only through determination and hardwork.It is very right said that' hardwork is the key to success.'
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