Television has had a significant influence on the culture of many societies. To
what extent would you say that television has positively or negatively affected the
cultural development of your society?
It has been around forty years since television was first introduced into Australian
households and people today still have mixed views on whether it has a positive or a
negative influence on the society.
Many people believe that television damages culture. It promotes the stronger cultures of
countries such as Britain and North America and weakens the cultures of less wealthy
countries. This is because the stronger, wealthier countries are able to assert their own
culture by producing more programs that are shown widely around the world. These
programs then influence people, particularly young people, in the countries where they
are shown.
Also, because television networks need to attract large audiences to secure their financial
survival, they must produce programs which are interesting to a broad range of people. In
Australia this range is very broad because we are a multicultural society and people of all
ages like to watch television. To interest all these different people, most television
programs are short in length, full of action and excitement, do not require much
intelligence or knowledge to understand, and follow universal themes common to all
cultures, such as love and crime. Television programs which concentrate on or develop
themes pertinent to one particular culture are not so successful because they interest a
smaller audience.
Nevertheless we much acknowledge that television does have some positive effects on
the cultures within a society as well. People who do not live within their own culture can,
in a limited way, access it through the multicultural station on the television. For example,
Aboriginal children who have grown up in white families, or migrants and international
students living in Australia, can watch programs from their own culture on the television.
In conclusion, I hold the view that television promotes and strengthens those cultures that
are wealthy and influential while it weakens the cultures that are already in a weakened
position.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, nevertheless, so, still, then, well, while, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1747.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 315.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.54603174603 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87588911838 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555555555556 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 537.3 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.5680752384 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.384615385 106.682146367 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2307692308 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.38461538462 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 23.0 4.38176352705 525% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188576734621 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0743475264634 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0513945759242 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0552864153693 0.151304729494 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0509067636853 0.056905535591 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.21 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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