international sporting events such as the olympic games and the football world cup can help reduce international tensions and also provide patriotic feelings
One of the international activity that is connecing al of the countries in the world is international tournament such as olympic games and the footbal world cup, which is usefull for reducing international conflict, and as well as creating the feelings of patriotism to their country. This writing totally agree with that statement, since the international turnament can add strong relation with another countries, also being representative of our nation in the international turnament is increasing our patriotic felling.
International tension is important thing to manage for all of the countries which can avoid war. One of the best way to reduce the international tension is creating activity which can be followed by all of the country such as olympic games and football world cup. This is because those actitivies can give space for all of the nations to manage a good comunication by being participant in international tournament which can get rid of international tension, and it will show a peace in international to all of the countries. For example, the tension of North and South Korea disapear directly in the olympic games and it is followed by making peace agreement for both.
In addition, being an athlet in the internatiol events create more patriotic feelings to their country. this is because it is not easy to be representative for our nation in that occasions, since we have to sacrifice many things. Therefore if we get achivement in that tournament, we will get patriotic feelings. For example, the Indonesian athlet who being representative in the football world cup are crying when nasional anthem is sung in that tournament
To conclute, there are a lot of advantages that is made by international sporting events. Not only nation can make a good relation with another nations, but also create a patriotic feeling in those tournament.
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- international sporting events such as the olympic games and the football world cup can help reduce international tensions and also provide patriotic feelings 67
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... but also create a patriotic feeling in those tournament.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, therefore, well, for example, in addition, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1572.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 304.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17105263158 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12657162696 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 176.041082164 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.457236842105 0.561755894193 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 491.4 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.4946338377 49.4020404114 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.909090909 106.682146367 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6363636364 20.7667163134 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.36363636364 7.06120827912 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.429871539841 0.244688304435 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.169071671262 0.084324248473 201% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.129339457699 0.0667982634062 194% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.260995080299 0.151304729494 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118027648747 0.056905535591 207% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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