Children today are too dependent on computers and electronic entertainment. It would be better for them to be outside playing sports than spending all day indoors.
Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
It has been recently argued that children nowadays are consuming too much time using smart devices, even though it is more beneficial for them to get involved in sports. I totally I agree with this statement and will highlight both the benefits of outdoor activities and the drawbacks of over dependence on electronics among youngsters.
To begin with the positives of sports, it is significant to consider that playing sports usually provides children with various advantages on both health and social aspects. To illustrate, spending more time outdoors has proved to be a vital element to enhance children’s sociability, as they tend to interact with peers and work in teams. Furthermore, a research conducted on a sample of 654 American children by child development international center has revealed that youngsters exercising regularly scored higher on emotional intelligence scale and showed more adaptability to changing life circumstances.
Furthermore, since children are still growing, exposing their bodies such devices for long hours would result in serious health issues. In fact, various recent diseases have developed alongside with the emergence of computers and the widespread of electronic games. For instance, a body of recent research about autism, which is one of the series chronic disorders emerged in the last decades, stated that % 80 of autistic children use tablets and smart more than 4 hours per day. Besides causing autism syndromes, the rates of social withdrawal, attention disorder, violence has been increasing among youngsters who spend less time outdoors.
In conclusion, while sports is recognized as a vital approach that lead younger generation to grow extrovert, over using computers seem to have so many harms on children. I believe that children’s usage of smart devices should be limited and they should participate in more outdoor activities.
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| 2019-05-04 | Salma Mohamed | 89 | view |
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, furthermore, if, so, still, while, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1609.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 292.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.5102739726 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99992816759 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.643835616438 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 491.4 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 38.8278676441 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.272727273 106.682146367 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5454545455 20.7667163134 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.63636363636 7.06120827912 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236583983489 0.244688304435 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0805140962981 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0382294490305 0.0667982634062 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132418404112 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0281000239535 0.056905535591 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 13.0946893788 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.39 8.58950901804 121% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 78.4519038076 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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