Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic regions. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of the year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed and cold enough, at least some of the year, for the ice to cover the sea separating the islands, allowing the deer to travel over it. Unfortunately, according to reports from local hunters, the deer populations are declining. Since these reports coincide with recent global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt, we can conclude that the purported decline in deer populations is the result of the deer's being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
population is the result of the deer's being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea. To buttresses his/her argument, the author cites the following evidence: first, Arctic deer need to limit their habitats to both warm and cold areas by migration; second, the reports local hunters and recent global warming trends show that the deer populations are decreasing. Tough the issue pointed have its merit, because of lack of relevant evidence and unaddressed assumptions, the author's argument is unsubstantiated and flawed.
To begin with, the creditability of the reports by local hunters is questionable. According to them, the deer populations are declining. It is possible the hunters mistakenly count the number of deer in the warm areas when a mass of deer actually live in cold areas. The population of deer calculated this way is unwarranted. In conclusion, the untested report by local hunter does not give strong evidence to support the variation in local environment.
In addition, the author unfairly assumes that the recent global warming trend takes place in the Arctic. The assumption seems valid at first glance. A careful investigation curtails its validity, since global trend does not necessarily apply to this specific area. If the temperature of arctic goes up, then it is possible that the migration of deer will be affected, thus supporting the author’s argument. If, nonetheless, the temperature goes down, we may indicate that there is no direct relationship between the migration of deer and global warming trend.
Last but not least, the author mistakenly ascribe the decline of deer in artic to their inability to follow their traditional migration patterns crossing the frozen sea. He/she fails to consider many other factors leading to its decline. For example, deer cannot acquire enough food, for which plants that used to feed on are extinct. Deer suffer from hunger owing to lack of enough food for survival. Another possible explanation of the recline in deer falls in the degraded habitat. Human activities cause indirect but negative impact on the ecology systems that affects the whole earth. Deer fail to find place for living and may be subjected to the death in this case. In conclusion, inconclusive explanations for the declining trend in deer makes the author's argument problematic.
To sum up, as it stands, the author's conclusion is based on several invalid assumptions which undermines its reliability. To further strengthen his/her argument, the author is suggested to include the facts as follows: first, the reports from local hunter went over careful and conprehensive calculation and is tested to be true by the most reputed experts; second, global warming also applies in artic, directly causing effect on the living of deer; finally, the sever impact of migration pattern is the only cause to declining in deer population, after excluding all other possible approaches.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- better to say: illegal hunting may be one of the reasons
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 474 350
No. of Characters: 2423 1500
No. of Different Words: 242 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.666 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.112 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.707 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 182 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 136 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 93 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 57 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.75 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.382 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.325 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.508 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.192 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 573, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...idence and unaddressed assumptions, the authors argument is unsubstantiated and flawed....
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Line 3, column 138, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...em, the deer populations are declining. it is possible the hunters mistakenly coun...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rt the variation in local environment. In addition, the author unfairly assumes...
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Line 5, column 266, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...ecessarily apply to this specific area. if the temperature of arctic goes up, then...
^^
Line 5, column 369, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...the migration of deer will be affected. if, nonetheless, the temperature goes down...
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Line 6, column 386, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'suffered'.
Suggestion: suffered
... of enough food for survival, deers are suffer from hunger. Another possible explanati...
^^^^^^
Line 6, column 438, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...hunger. Another possible explanation of the recline in deer falls in the degraded habitat. ...
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Line 6, column 591, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: When
...ogy systems, affecting the whole earth. when this cirsumstance happens, deer fail to...
^^^^
Line 6, column 776, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...r the declining trend in deer makes the authors argument problematic. To sum up, as ...
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Line 8, column 30, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ematic. To sum up, as it stands, the authors conclusion is based on several invalid ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, if, may, nonetheless, second, so, then, for example, in addition, in conclusion, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 55.5748502994 130% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 16.3942115768 146% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2522.0 2260.96107784 112% => OK
No of words: 478.0 441.139720559 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27615062762 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67581127817 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76441459634 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 204.123752495 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529288702929 0.468620217663 113% => OK
syllable_count: 772.2 705.55239521 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 17.0 8.76447105788 194% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.22255489022 308% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 86.9705858192 57.8364921388 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.652173913 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7826086957 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.17391304348 5.70786347227 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 6.88822355289 189% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178796950935 0.218282227539 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0539954391574 0.0743258471296 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0506221970489 0.0701772020484 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101861576096 0.128457276422 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0343116617327 0.0628817314937 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.3799401198 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.32208582834 110% => OK
difficult_words: 136.0 98.500998004 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.