New technologies have changed the way children spend their free time. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
It is true that new technological inventions have significantly influenced many areas of children’s lives these days. While there are some certain drawbacks of this trend, I would argue that the benefits are greater for young people.
Undeniably, using modern gadgets may lead to addictions and being passive in children. In other words, kids who are easy to be attracted by the convenience and the vivid animations may become addicted when they are early exposed to these devices. In Vietnam, for instance, the number of children addicted to computer games has risen since these games were imported to the country. Moreover, children are likely to spend less time one motion games when they are interested in new devices. That is considered as one of the main causes of lots of health problems such as diabetes, obesity, heart-related problems, and other diseases.
On the other hand, there will be more advantageous if children use new technologies properly. First, these modern devices give kids access to the immense source of information that they can widen their knowledge and determine their future career paths. In addition, through learning from different types of information, children raise awareness of some diseases and then try to avoid them. Take my overweight nephew for an example; he stops eating fast food and insists his mother buy him a running machine after watching a TV program about the dangers of obesity. Finally, children can also expand their relationships by using social networking sites such as Facebook, Twitter.
In conclusion, it seems to me that modern gadgets are harmful to children to some aspects, but children can benefit in many ways if these devices are used rightly.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, so, well, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 41.998997996 55% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 910.0 1615.20841683 56% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 173.0 315.596192385 55% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26011560694 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.62669911048 4.20363070211 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7529395524 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 124.0 176.041082164 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.71676300578 0.561755894193 128% => OK
syllable_count: 278.1 506.74238477 55% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 20.6968596652 49.4020404114 42% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 91.0 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.2 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210404326545 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0707250925614 0.084324248473 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0610174278694 0.0667982634062 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125148583368 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.06440319587 0.056905535591 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.93 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.04 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 78.4519038076 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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