The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chartshows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how peoplethink the costs of adult education should be shared.Write a report for a university lecturer, desc

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The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart
shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people
think the costs of adult education should be shared.
Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information shown below.
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The illustrations provided represent the outcome of survey of adult education. The first chart explains the reason why people decides to study in adulthood while the pie chart shows how the price of adult education should be contributed.

There are some reasons why adult consider to study. Interest in subjects and to gain qualifications are the two most important reasons adults decide to go back to school. People think that the cost of adult study should be shared by individuals, employers and by taxpayers.

It is clear from the chart that 78% of adults think to study due to their interest in subject and gaining qualifications. The remaining 22% of adults consider going back to study because they believe further study would help them in current jobs, prospect of promotions, enjoy learning, changing of jobs and finally meeting people. It is interesting that 9% adult go to study simply because they want to meet people while 12% of adult want to change their current job and thus decide to study. In summary, the most common reason adults decide to study is interest in subject followed by to gain qualifications. Whereas the least reason is meeting people.

According to the pie chart the cost of study should be contributed by individual, employers and taxpayers. However, 40% people believe that the cost of mature education should be paid by individual himself while 35% suggest employers should pay for their employees undergoing study. Finally, only 25% people think taxpayers should pay for adult education.

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