tpo 50
Nowadays, people want to get more information about their country in the past. It could be substantiated by reading history and pay more attention to historical books. Although some individuals believe universities should devote a history course to the students without considering their majors, in my perspective, it is not very exciting and sufficient at the university. So, in what follows, I will substantiate my viewpoint by giving specific examples and reasons.
Firstly, at the university, some young people prepared for working in future can take a few specialized courses instead of history to learn more about their major, and it can save their time spending for unnecessary classes. For example, when I was a bachelor degree student, there were a few religious courses at the university. I could take some other courses related to electronic being my major in undergraduate. But, it did not occur. After finishing the Bachelor of Science, I had to take private classes to learn several applications related to my university major, and because I did so, I wasted more time for learning. Thus, if unrelated courses do not take place in the universities, it will be available for the students to take their main courses.
Secondly, there is no need to take a history course at the universities because this kind of classes can be learned in the lower levels, such as primary, elementary, and high school. Not only can the students learn more about their country in the past, but also there is no need to learn detail of history. So lower levels of schools can be adequate for this purpose. Moreover, youth can use the internet to search about ancient time due to being more references from different authors in the internet network. For instance, when I want to know about the Sasanian Emperor governed in the Middle East a thousand year ago, I search on google, and I can find more books and maps about them.
To conclude, while some individuals want to take a history course at the university, I believe that there is no need to this class, and people can learn history in the lower levels of school or they can use the internet in their free time to find about their country and governments in the past.
- Mars, Moon, Scientist, radiation, zero-gravity environment, water, food, hydroponic, shielded, many months 88
- humpback whales, intelligence, brain, shark, migrate, straight line, star, navigate, spy-hopping, intelligent 75
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 66
- Mars, Earth, hydroponic, water, dangerous level, send human 85
- Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 60
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, while, for example, for instance, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1840.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 380.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84210526316 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74333238529 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.473684210526 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 589.5 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.9609262739 48.9658058833 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.0 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.75 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4375 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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