It was my 20th birthday
A SHORT STORY
it was my 21th birthday and I was looking forward to seeing my friends. we were meeting at my friend’s motel room. this motel room have 4 people who was my classmates. And I was excited and got to the motel room at exactly 7 o’clock the time we had arranged to meet. I was looking for a familiar face, but no one had arrived yet so I decided to wait in front of the motel room and stood patiently in the hot evening sunshine.
The darkness dropped quickly, but no one here. ‘Where are they’ I thought. At half past seven I was still waiting outside the motel room. so I called my best friend Thuy. ‘Why she does answer her phone’ I asked myself. Then I called my, Tuyet, Hau, but they didn’t answer either. ‘What going on’ I wondered.
At 8 o’clock, my friends had forgotten my birthday and I felt lonely and miserable so I decided to come back my room. At this moment my friends opened the front door and jumped up. All of them shouted ‘Surprise’ with the big birthday cake I have never saw it befor, ‘Thai make a wish’ my friends shouted. After I had made a wish we came in the room and turned on the lights. we together eta big birthday cake, biscuits and drank a big bottle of coca cola. I drank too much coca cola and in the end it was the best birthday I have ever had.
| Post date | Users | Rates | Link to Content |
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| 2019-07-27 | Thai nguyen | 56 | view |
Grammar and spelling errors:
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A SHORT STORY it was my 21th birthday and I was looking ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, look, so, still, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 24.0651302605 175% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 24.0 41.998997996 57% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 0.0 8.3376753507 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1117.0 1615.20841683 69% => OK
No of words: 253.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.41501976285 5.12529762239 86% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98822939669 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72364426096 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.569169960474 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 337.5 506.74238477 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.60771543086 81% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.3162519857 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 62.0555555556 106.682146367 58% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 14.0555555556 20.7667163134 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.44444444444 7.06120827912 20% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.288719039259 0.244688304435 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105421992481 0.084324248473 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114134755592 0.0667982634062 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21723576334 0.151304729494 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0933001122572 0.056905535591 164% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.4 13.0946893788 49% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 82.65 50.2224549098 165% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.2 11.3001002004 46% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 7.76 12.4159519038 63% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.08 8.58950901804 82% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 78.4519038076 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.33 Out of 6
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