A recent study indicates that children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children living in suburban areas in the United States, despite the fact that people in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal receive little to no professional dental care, while people in suburban areas in the United States see a dentist an average of 1.25 times per year. Thus, regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay.
The author's argument is lacking originality. though it is true that the fact he has shown is not entirely wrong,yet without any further proof, we cannot rely on this arguments saying. He is comparing two different regions dental condition without comparing the different variables that's affecting the dental condition.
Firstly, the author needs to give enough information about the environment condition of these two regions, if they have same environmental condition or not. The temperature in Himalayan mountain region in Nepal will be very low comparing to suburban areas in the United States. this will have an enormous effect on dental condition. what if, high temperature causes higher damage in tooth. In that case the author's argument is not valid.
Secondly, The main reason that causes damage to the tooth is eating food. What if the children of the Himalayan are eating hygienic food which are not harmful for tooth, and the children of USA are eating otherwise. In this case, there is a higher probability of tooth decay for those who lives in USA .This will weaken the argument presented by the author.
Finally, The author is arguing that the Himalayan children are receiving very little to no professional care. We cannot totally rely on this. May be the children of the Himalayan are receiving dental care from some dentists who doesn't hold any professional degree, yet they are very effective. This also weaken the argument the author is providing.
In the conclusion, I would say, without knowing the information of the effect of environment, food habits we cannot just decide that the regular dental care is not effective.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 272 350
No. of Characters: 1342 1500
No. of Different Words: 138 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.061 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.934 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.597 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 104 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 67 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 53 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.923 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.409 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.615 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.367 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.63 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.101 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 5, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
The authors argument is lacking originality. though...
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Line 1, column 46, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Though
...uthors argument is lacking originality. though it is true that the fact he has shown i...
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Line 1, column 112, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , yet
... fact he has shown is not entirely wrong,yet without any further proof, we cannot re...
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Line 1, column 282, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
...thout comparing the different variables thats affecting the dental condition. Fir...
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Line 3, column 279, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...to suburban areas in the United States. this will have an enormous effect on dental ...
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Line 3, column 334, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: What
...an enormous effect on dental condition. what if, high temperature causes higher dama...
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Line 3, column 408, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...igher damage in tooth. In that case the authors argument is not valid. Secondly, Th...
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Line 5, column 302, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...f tooth decay for those who lives in USA .This will weaken the argument presented ...
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Line 5, column 304, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
...tooth decay for those who lives in USA .This will weaken the argument presented by t...
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Line 5, column 359, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n the argument presented by the author. Finally, The author is arguing that the ...
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Line 7, column 148, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (May) must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...e. We cannot totally rely on this. May be the children of the Himalayan are rece...
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Line 7, column 180, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...is. May be the children of the Himalayan are receiving dental care from some dent...
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Line 7, column 231, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ving dental care from some dentists who doesnt hold any professional degree, yet they ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 55.5748502994 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1385.0 2260.96107784 61% => OK
No of words: 270.0 441.139720559 61% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12962962963 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.56307096286 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67613801543 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 204.123752495 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.533333333333 0.468620217663 114% => OK
syllable_count: 431.1 705.55239521 61% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.9880303907 57.8364921388 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.5625 119.503703932 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.875 23.324526521 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.70786347227 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190209495073 0.218282227539 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0571509422395 0.0743258471296 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0851797061694 0.0701772020484 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0908281173666 0.128457276422 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0678265961956 0.0628817314937 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.3799401198 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.3550499002 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 98.500998004 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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