Many countries invest money to prepare competitors to join top competitions like Olympic Game and the World Cup. It is necessary to offer money to encourage children to exercise. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The question of whether children should or not be invested in galvanizing to do exercise has received a great deal of public attention as many nations are financing sports sectors to engage in big leagues such as Olympic Game or World Cup nowadays. From my perspective, although this trend can be disadvantageous, the upsides are far more significant.
There would be several demerits brought by this trend. First, since exercise like work-out is an activity that demands both physical and mental stamina, children could be put in jeopardy such as being exhausted even some injuries when they do exercise. For example, they might suffer from a bone fracture or head trauma while they do lifting weights or push-up. Additionally, exercise such as going to the gym is quiet monotonous for children, which does not require competition or team-working like football. By forcing children to exercise, they can be irritated which may affect detrimentally their mental health.
Nevertheless, there are also a whole host of reasons why people are inclined to encourage children to exercise. The first evident benefit would be that exercise such as cycling or walking is the best way to prevent children from abusing electronic devices which can make them antisocial. In other words, children can avoid getting addicted to the video game which leads them to be prone to sedimentary lifestyle with alternative activities like playing sport, participating in outside activities. Moreover, if the parents offer money to encourage children to engage in a variety of sports clubs, they can detect their children’s talents of sport in early life. This means that it is likely a good opportunity so that they could invest in their children to prompt their potentially gifted abilities.
To conclude, I argue that despite this trend is not without disadvantage, the merits should be more considered. By concerning all the pros and cons, it will do more good than harm.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: Whether; The question whether
The question of whether children should or not be invested in g...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, while, even so, for example, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1649.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 317.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20189274448 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87898402139 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611987381703 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 508.5 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.0911807119 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.785714286 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6428571429 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.28571428571 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175312674592 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0579316930161 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0491585974903 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0982807279902 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0499391590922 0.056905535591 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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