The university has provided students who are going to enter university with two summer vocation programs. Which one do you think is better for students?
1) Take some college courses in advance. (some courses that related to students’ major)
2) Visit some history museums or historical relics.
There is no shortage of opinion on which is better for students to take some college courses in advance or to visit some history museums or historical relics. As far as I am concerned, I strongly think that it is better for students to visit some history museums or historical relics.
To begin with, summer vocation is short, visiting some history museums or historical relics which is relax and is more suitable for students to do during summer vocation. There is a fact that cannot be neglected that students are excited about going to university and mostly of them are willing to have fun. Therefore, they may not want to take courses and are not able to concentrate on class. However, visiting museums and history relics is relaxing and appealing. Take myself for example, university provided me with math and computer courses during my summer vocation. Not only me but also lots of other students who have the same major took these courses the whole summer vocation. However, we did not learn much from it because we are not able to focus on classes while my friends may travel around the world.
Secondly, history is important for students, visiting history museums or historical relics is beneficial for students to learn history. There is no denying that history is an essential subject which every student should learn it. Nevertheless, not every student majors in history. Therefore it is great time during summer vocation that students have easier access to learn history. Due to fierce competition among students on job hunting, students may not have time and energy to learn history after going to university. One of BBC news shows that people nowadays are lack of knowledge of history. What’s more, it causes people forget the lessons before like the first and second world war and forget how their ancestor made effort to achieve independence and freedom.
Last but not least, students can have a greater chance to get familiar with each other when visiting some history museums or history relics compared with just taking courses. As we know, other than learn knowledge, there is another important things we need to learn at university is to make friends. So visiting history museums and history relics surely a suitable way to achieve this goal. Compared to taking courses which students have more communication with teachers, visiting museums strengthen connection and communication between students. They can behave more free and have talk with other students during visiting process. Furthermore, they also can discover students who have the same interest and become good friends. You know, a good friends is life-long wealth that needs to cherish.
To put all into a nutshell, taking above three factors into consideration, I definitely approve of the opinion that it is better for students to vising history museums and relics during summer vocation.
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Suggestion: relaxed
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Suggestion: Therefore,
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, while, for example, you know, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2421.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 474.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10759493671 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66599839874 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54867077702 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.464135021097 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 761.4 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.7760441152 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.875 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.75 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.04166666667 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.388895406873 0.236089414692 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120208242731 0.076458572812 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.090889760648 0.0737576698707 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215180346728 0.150856017488 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0946476993617 0.0645574589148 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.14 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.