Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Entertainment is essential part of children life. Nowadays kids studies becoming hard and leisure activities are gradually reduces. I prefer playing traditional games for enjoyment. I vehemently agree, with that electronic games are useless and kids should avoid playing them.
To initiate with , children are vital part of nation’s development. Increases the usage of electronic gadgets have bad affect on kids brain and eyesight. When they are sitting whole day in front of computer and elevate the chances to weight gain. Obesity itself a major disease. LED's and other devices emit blue rays that are bad impact on brain development and creates headache and irritates eyes. For instance, I do remember my cousin who always was sitting down in front of laptops and gradually he weakened his eyesight. Now he always wearing spectacles. In addition to that, he became obese.
In addition to that, communication plays a vital role to develop confidence in kids. Sedentary life style is full of diseases. If they are staying whole day at home they are unable to make new friends. Furthermore, outdoors games are good for muscles strengthening and opportunity to gain more skills. It develops competition habit in each other. Computer sports effect children education like, they always focus on games and neglecting their studies. For example, my younger brother always playing games in fact his last term occur, but he did not quit his habit. On the exam, hardly he studied six hours a day. When his result came, he was failed in three major subjects. His parents were very disappointed and then they took his iPad. Electronic devices are full of time wastage if uses excessively.
In conclusion, children are the imperative part of nation’s development. Parents should not allow them to playing computer games whole day because it is full of time wastage. Sitting down in front of computer entire day produces diseases like, obesity, weak eyesight etc. lack of communication create problems in future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 17, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...void playing them. To initiate with , children are vital part of nation'...
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Line 5, column 125, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
...he usage of electronic gadgets have bad affect on kids brain and eyesight. When they are ...
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Line 5, column 545, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wears'.
Suggestion: wears
...he weakened his eyesight. Now he always wearing spectacles. In addition to that, he bec...
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Line 9, column 128, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...dentary life style is full of diseases. If they are staying whole day at home they...
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Line 13, column 316, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
.... lack of communication create problems in future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, then, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1703.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 325.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76464617461 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.590769230769 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 530.1 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.1344086022 60% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.0557013204 48.9658058833 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 63.0740740741 100.406767564 63% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.037037037 20.6045352989 58% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 3.33333333333 5.45110844103 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175974408288 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0449536001323 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0682025210375 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126973954425 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0616474869226 0.0645574589148 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.3 58.1214874552 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.22 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.0537634409 68% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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