You are moving to another country for studying. Write to your friend who is already there, asking for arranging a part time job.
Explain to him why you need this job.
How he can help you find this job?
Hello Abc,
Hope you are doing fine. You would be glad to know that I am coming to Canada for doing my MBA in International Business. I recently got an email from Canada University confirming my admission. I will be moving to Canada by next month.
As you are well aware how my father financed my education all through his life. This time as well for my MBA, he has mortgaged our house to pay my tuition fee. I don’t want to burden him further. So I have decided to take up a part-time job to at least pay my hostel expenses.
As you are a high level executive in a multi-national company, I am sure you can land me into some good part-time job. I am willing to do any kind of work which does not hamper my studies. Your recommendation in this regard will be extremely helpful.
thank you
Xyz
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 11, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Hello Abc, Hope you are doing fine. You would be gl...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...will be moving to Canada by next month. As you are well aware how my father fina...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... moving to Canada by next month. As you are well aware how my father financ...
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Line 9, column 283, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...job to at least pay my hostel expenses. As you are a high level executive in a m...
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Line 17, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Thank
...regard will be extremely helpful. thank you Xyz
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Line 17, column 10, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ll be extremely helpful. thank you Xyz
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, well, at least, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 0.0 5.05154639175 0% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 32.9175257732 91% => OK
Preposition: 18.0 26.3917525773 68% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 669.0 937.175257732 71% => OK
No of words: 152.0 206.0 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.40131578947 4.54256449028 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.51124308557 3.78020617076 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65369000396 2.54303337028 104% => OK
Unique words: 106.0 127.690721649 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.697368421053 0.622605031667 112% => OK
syllable_count: 215.1 290.88556701 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 16.3608247423 73% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.5010481973 44.8134815571 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 55.75 76.5299724578 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.6666666667 16.8248392259 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.58333333333 4.34317383033 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254614234953 0.216113520407 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0869179027628 0.0766984524023 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0640959437569 0.0603063233224 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159025237524 0.12726935374 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0405633903836 0.0580467560999 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 5.6 8.37731958763 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.22 70.7449484536 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 7.45979381443 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.35 8.71597938144 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.35 7.59969072165 97% => OK
difficult_words: 30.0 41.2886597938 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 8.62886597938 64% => OK
gunning_fog: 6.8 8.54432989691 80% => OK
text_standard: 6.0 8.15463917526 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.