There are many advertisements directed at children, such as snacks, toys, and other goods. Parents argue that children are under pressure. Advertisers claim that advertisements provide useful information. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
<p style="margin-top:0cm;background:#F9F9F9">In this digital world, the
marketing industry is penetrating into children’ lives throught diferent ways
in order to promote specific products including snacks, toys and other goods.
Parents believe that these advertisements are too much for their children. Advertisers
claim the opposite, that they are trying to provide useful information. From my
perspective, I agree with the former opinion.<o:p></o:p></p>
<p style="margin-top:0cm;background:#F9F9F9">On the one hand, advertisements
are undeniably offering helpful information of the products. They design
colorful and attractive videos to present the goods’ detail including the
ingredients, the process to make it and their products’ strength comparing to
other peers. Parents can use this information to decide which is the
appropriate things to their children based on different criteria, such as
price, color or quality. For example, the wealthy might purchase an
international version of remote control aircraft for their son because they can
afford it while a middle – class family would likely to choose an ordinary robot
that is advertised on the internet with a understandable cost.<o:p></o:p></p>
<p style="margin-top:0cm;background:#F9F9F9">On the other hand, too much
advertising on the electronic media can put children under pressure. Firstly,
children may believe in unrealistic and unhealthy information in the
advertisements which are created by the company to promote their products. For
instance, when my niece went to kindergarten, she was exposed to an advertising
campaign for a milk company, thus, she trusted that she could fly if she drank
milk every day. Eventually, I had to explain to her that is was just
exaggerating video. Second, the youngsters might claim their parents for new
goods when they watch commercial advertising without a sound understanding of
it. As a result, they might lose their childhood when they should hanging out
with friends because of having to deal with several toys.<o:p></o:p></p>
<p style="margin-top:0cm;background:#F9F9F9">In conclusion, though
advertisements can present the detail of products so that parents can choose
the appropriate things among several candidates, I personally believe that they
are too much for the adolescent. Youngsters might trust the wrong information
and spend their time watching videos and buying toys instead of playing with
their peers.<o:p></o:p></p>
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, may, second, so, thus, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2273.0 1615.20841683 141% => OK
No of words: 352.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 6.45738636364 5.12529762239 126% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 6.16999346909 2.80592935109 220% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 200.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568181818182 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 599.4 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 114.282272772 49.4020404114 231% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 174.846153846 106.682146367 164% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0769230769 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 33.0 4.38176352705 753% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 14.0 5.01903807615 279% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211498288599 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0969741418381 0.084324248473 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0786949406498 0.0667982634062 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0560748056698 0.151304729494 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0710612832265 0.056905535591 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.5 13.0946893788 172% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 20.48 12.4159519038 165% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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