The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
We have always come across the name of famous people or the people consider to be successful, they have one thing in common, they all did hard work and struggled a lot to be at the place or point in their life where people start calling them successful. But there is one more critical feature common among most of them, they all were away from most of the worldly luxuries and conveniences. The prompt posits the thought that the luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into true strong and independent individuals. I strongly agree with the thought because of the following two reasons.
Firstly, people who are exposed to hardship from the childhood tent to realize the bitter reality of the life. Thus, they are better prepared than those who are always pampered with luxuries and services. For example, we all know the rocket man of India Mr. A.P.J Abdul Kalam. He is ex-president and a famous scientist and has work a lot harder than we can imagine in his childhood to support himself and his family. He used to study under the streetlight of the railway station every evening and in morning he used to help his father in work to earn money. Even in such a hardship, he managed to complete his studies and became a scientist and then the president of India. Now, on contrary, if we take a person who had all the luxuries and services to complete his needs then he shall never break his shell and will always be unprepared for what the future might hold for him. He shall not have the experience of how to deal with the real-life problems and thus, he might not have the calmness and frame of mind to handle the problems when left alone in the society. This suggests that a person's strong character is built by the hardship and struggle he has faced and not by the luxuries and conveniences which spoils him rotten.
Secondly, People who are devoid of the luxuries are conveniences are better able to understand the real needs and requirements of the life and thus, they can manage their life better than the individual who has never seen and struggle in life. For example, Ram Jaitmalany his father late Rammohan made a fortune by textile business while his son was unable to maintain the fortune passed down to him by his father. They reason was his father had struggled a lot and had experience about the market and understood the people better then him as he only did his MBA and started to look after their textile business. Thus, we can say that luxuries don't make a strong individual.
Some people may say that these luxuries and convenience don't hinder the process of building a strong moral character of person but, they tend to forgot that a person with the knowledge is as week as a man without a weapon in a forest of wild animals and is more prone to cheat and troubles then others. Simply, putting it can be accepted that the luxuries and convenience don't help build strong and independent individuals.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, then, thus, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 33.0 14.8657303371 222% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 33.0505617978 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2454.0 2235.4752809 110% => OK
No of words: 526.0 442.535393258 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66539923954 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78901763229 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47955686148 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 215.323595506 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475285171103 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 752.4 704.065955056 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 6.24550561798 272% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.6539292949 60.3974514979 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.157894737 118.986275619 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6842105263 23.4991977007 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.63157894737 5.21951772744 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182745716478 0.243740707755 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0691775267828 0.0831039109588 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0844457644456 0.0758088955206 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123716626311 0.150359130593 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0554767885352 0.0667264976115 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.1392134831 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 48.8420337079 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 100.480337079 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.