Young people living in rural areas have to study or work in big cities away from their homes. What are the reasons? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
Inga Rhonda King, the general director of Unite Nations Economic and Social Council, said” Due to the progress of economy, the gap between urban and rural areas have widened in decades, and it forces young generation living in remote rural places to travel to big cities to seek for better opportunities of studying and working.” While it seems to become the tragedy for those youngsters, based on my knowledge, however, the pros of this trend are more than its cons.
The advances of economy only benefit to urban cities, in spite of having a better economic situation— more investments, salary growing, and more infrastructures. The reasons are that government cannot spend as much money in both rural and urban cities to construct the same infrastructures because of a limitation of resources. Also, most rural cities locate in inconvenient places such as mountains, inland areas, or the places without river or harbor, which will smash a desire of a company to invest. As a result, young people cannot hope to get the same opportunities and resources than those in urban.
The negative influence of youngsters commuting to work and study in cities is getting the gap widens, and also overpopulation. Losing young population means losing labor. Therefore, rural towns can only develop agriculture rather than industry which can make more money. A lot of exotic people, however, make the cities get crowded and also high living pressure and pollution such as New York— the most developed city in the world but also high crime rates and dirty subway system.
In contrast, young people can have better education, and get into a big company or some government institutions to facilitate the economy of a whole nation. If they earn money, they can get the chance to go abroad to broaden their horizons and can even help others who are disadvantage. For instance, my college friend, Joe, come from Yilan county, which is the rural place in Taiwan, and we study in the capital city— Taipei. He works at the bank after graduating and joins the charity to help people in Africa. If he had never studied in cities, he might not get those experiences.
All in all, the gap might become widen but the whole country even the world may become better if young people can study or work in urban. They are the treasure of society, and cannot be limited in their rural towns to forbid their ambitions.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 266, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...their horizons and can even help others who are disadvantage. For instance, my college ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, therefore, while, for instance, in contrast, such as, as a result, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 10.4138276553 221% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2007.0 1615.20841683 124% => OK
No of words: 407.0 315.596192385 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9312039312 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66031763749 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 176.041082164 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538083538084 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 640.8 506.74238477 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 0.809619238477 865% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 94.2950613434 49.4020404114 191% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.4375 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4375 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.9375 7.06120827912 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248573141481 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.075153908716 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0377042813218 0.0667982634062 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136645429815 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0210715867631 0.056905535591 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.03 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 29.0 9.78957915832 296% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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