do you agree of disagree with the following statement? It is important to know what is
happening around the world, even if it does not affect your personal lives.
The world is connected more than ever before thanks to advancement of science and information technology. These developments have given us both lots of opportunities such as we can see far away events as if we're actually there through internet, etc. personally, i belive that we should be aware of what is happening around the globe. I feel this way for two reasons, which i will explain the following essay.
First of all, even though there are many countries around the world that seem so different and restricted from one another, our lives have more dependent on each other compared to previous ages. there are lots of factors that affect globally, such as politics, international trade, illness, natural disasters and so on. so it is the utmost necessity that we should to obtains information globally. one event is a compelling example of this. In the year 2008, the financial crisis occurred initially in us. this crisis, though it seemed happening far away in another continent, struck my country harshly. Every price of goods were doubled, and the value of my country's currency fell dramatically. As a result, there were lots of unemployed people, and many people became homeless.
Secondly, acquiring information about the world events prepare you for unplanned events. we don't know what will happen to us in a year or even a minute. we maybe get lost in a foreign country by accident or maybe win a lottery to travel abroad, but either way it is vital to have knowledge on what's happening in foreign countries. To be more specific, my brother had a chance to go abroad for business meeting. he got this opportunity suddenly because someone from his work was supposed to go cancelled for some personal reason. In the preparation of his travel, he bought seemingly unnecessary item, and his teammates who would go with him wondered and even questioned him for buying that high priced item. Upon the meeting he gave the item which is highly respected traditionally in that country. As a result their business meeting became successful and two companies strengthened their bond. All of this success is result of my brother's habit of watching documentaries about foreign countries and their customs.
In conclusion, i strongly believe that it is the most necessary thing for knowing about the world. this is because the world is more connected than ever and it will prepare you for life changing events.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, i feel, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2010.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 406.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95073891626 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73768112811 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573891625616 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 628.2 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.4556069938 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.3913043478 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.652173913 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.04347826087 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.113229772436 0.236089414692 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0305076598942 0.076458572812 40% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0357503611881 0.0737576698707 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0723375470146 0.150856017488 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0187943868444 0.0645574589148 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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