The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age group who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar chart examines the fitness levels of people working regularly among males and females of six different age groups in Australia.
Overall,the greater percentage of males are only at teenage ,but females are nearly equal and greater than males in fitness activities in the year of 2010. However, across the two genders, the pattern differs before and after the age of 44.
In Australia, 52.8%of the 15to24 age group made by men in regular workout, and this figure is the highest on the chart. The 35to 44s contributed the least at only 39.5%. But in the case of female, these figures are almost equal in younger age, and in 35-45age group this number was 13%greater than male. The level of fitness from the 25to 34 age groups experienced incline by the female, at 48.9%.
While the physical activities up to age of 44 the male age groups had decline as compare to female. They rose 43.1% by the age group of 45-54 ,by males, but the difference between the gender were 10% and this figure of women was the highest percentage of the year. Whereas, at the ages of 55-65had slight increase in male of 2% and minute change in female's. The figure for the over 65 was nearly similar in compare of two genders, but female's are still a little higher than men
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, still, whereas, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 6.8 162% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.15609756098 0% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 33.7804878049 133% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1051.0 965.302439024 109% => OK
No of words: 226.0 196.424390244 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65044247788 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.87727950738 3.73543355544 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.29598269458 2.65546596893 86% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 106.607317073 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553097345133 0.547539520022 101% => OK
syllable_count: 324.9 283.868780488 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 0.482926829268 1242% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.4243557064 43.030603864 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.5454545455 112.824112599 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5454545455 22.9334400587 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.54545454545 5.23603664747 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19759439381 0.215688989381 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0804253212664 0.103423049105 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0550024541239 0.0843802449381 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132008802328 0.15604864568 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0282964412788 0.0819641961636 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.2329268293 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 61.2550243902 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.69 11.4140731707 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.06136585366 93% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 40.7170731707 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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