TPO-12 - Integrated Writing Task
Jane Austen (1775-1817) is one of the most famous of all English novelists, and today her novels are more popular than ever, with several recently adapted as Hollywood movies. But we do not have many records of what she looked like. For a long time, the only accepted image of Austen was an amateur sketch of an adult Austen made by her sister Cassandra. However recently a professionally painted, full-length portrait of a teenage girl owned by a member of the Austen family has come up for sale. Although the professional painting is not titled Jane Austen, there are good reasons to believe she is the subject.
First, in 1882, several decades after Austen's death, Austen's family gave permission to use the portrait as an illustration in an edition of her letters. Austen's family clearly recognized it as a portrait of the author. So, for over a century now, the Austen family itself has endorsed the claim that the girl in the portrait is Jane Austen.
Second, the face in the portrait clearly resembles the one in Cassandra's sketch, which we know depicts Austen. Though somewhat amateurish, the sketch communicates definite details about Austen's face. Even though the Cassandra sketch is of an adult Jane Austen, the features are still similar to those of the teenage girl in the painting. The eyebrows, nose, mouth, and overall shape of the face are very much like those in the full-length portrait.
Third, although the painting is unsigned and undated, there is evidence that it was painted when Austen was a teenager. The style links it to Ozias Humphrey, a society portrait painter who was the kind of professional the wealthy Austen family would hire. Humphrey was active in the late 1780s and early 1790s, exactly the period when Jane Austen was the age of the girl in the painting.
The lecture contradicts facts related to the portrait of jane austen as specified in the passage.
According to the passage, the family members of jane austen recognized the girl in the portrait as the subject. However, the professor clearly states that the portrait was authorized for use after almost 70 years after her death. As a result of this, the present-day family members might not have seen her and hence this theory is questionable which predicts a loose connection to the entire family members.
Furthermore, the face of the teenage girl in the portrait resembles the face of the adult jane austen sketched by her sister Cassandra. but this is refuted in the lecture by implying that the portrait could be that of a relative, that is any of her cousins or her niece Mary Ann, who were of her own age group.
Moreover, the style of the painting links to the painter Humphrey who was the kind of professional, the wealthy austen family will hire. Also, at that period, this painter was active, supports the claim. Nevertheless, other evidence dates back to the period when the canvas was sold by William when she was 27 years old. but austen was older than the girl in the portrait.
To put it in a nutshell, the above facts could be summarized that even though jane’s family members claim her portrait to be true, evidences supported in the lecture, refute the claim.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 137, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...usten sketched by her sister Cassandra. but this is refuted in the lecture by imply...
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Line 13, column 322, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...d by William when she was 27 years old. but austen was older than the girl in the p...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, kind of, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 22.412803532 85% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 30.3222958057 102% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1164.0 1373.03311258 85% => OK
No of words: 240.0 270.72406181 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.93597934253 4.04702891845 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54869247524 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 145.348785872 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5375 0.540411800872 99% => OK
syllable_count: 349.2 419.366225166 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1045530606 49.2860985944 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.818181818 110.228320801 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8181818182 21.698381199 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.36363636364 7.06452816374 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.485772612436 0.272083759551 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.210273806245 0.0996497079465 211% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.134349205136 0.0662205650399 203% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.255072107266 0.162205337803 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0772704924166 0.0443174109184 174% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.3589403974 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 53.8541721854 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 12.2367328918 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.42419426049 102% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 63.6247240618 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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