TPO27 (independent)
If people have the opportunity of take a secured job they should take it right away, rather than waiting for a job that is more satisfying.
People have lots of desired which a few of people can reach to. There is a significant and complex controversy to decide go into an occupation which is secure, or pursue the desires and interests. Some people are indecision to choose one of them. I, personally speaking, am of the opinion that it is better to follow the interests. In what follow, the reasons to support my viewpoint are vindicated.
To begin with, it can influence the society in a evil way if populations choose to be in a secure and unsatisfying job. To make it clear, it would last just a short time, if people went to a secure job which isn't satisfying. people might involve in a secure and unenjoyable vocation, but they will be tierd of working, and it would cause the life monotony in their life, and it maybe make them sad and depressed. This affects in the whole society; A depressed society. A crystial clear instance is my landhome, Iran. there aren't great wide of career opportunity in here, and that makes people to go into a job which can enable them make money. As we all can see, our society isn't a happy community.
Furthermore, people can be more prosperous in their vocation if they like that. it is unpuzzeling that persons will make a significant try to improve in their job and occupation. To put it into a more vivid picture, my younger brother used to be gymnastic coach, in spite of his interest in football. it was because of that he needed money in that time. he switched his occupation as soon as he found a job as a football coach. he became a famous trainer in our town, However he wasn't a renown gymnastic coach.
In conclusion, taking all the aforementioned reasons, I believe that it is better to work in a desire job. being happy and being more seccusful are the main and worth considering reasons.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, in conclusion, in spite of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1481.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 326.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.54294478528 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70390725741 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.536809815951 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 482.4 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.7316858215 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.05 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.05 5.45110844103 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191960732285 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0511063389537 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0524034042042 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106246685372 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0353655722776 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.1 11.7677419355 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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