in many countries imprisonment is the most common solution to crimes. However, some people believe that better education will be more effective solution. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is widely accepted that the majority of governments invest billions of dollars on incarceration rather than on raising citizen’s awareness. Although imprisonment is the proper threat of punishment which prevents potential acts of committing an offense, this essay assumes that education is far effective in reducing the crime rate than putting in jail.
On the one hand, punishment in prison is deemed to be a crucial measure to isolate criminal elements from the world as well as punish the act of breaking the law. By the judgment of the legal system, individual offenders will be sentenced to specific years in prison based on their severity. When criminals are subject to years in jail, they will be deprived of freedom which forces them to separate their loved ones and society. Only if the prisoner suffers the endless year in the loneliness and agony, can they reconsider the consequences of their flawed decision and repent of their sins. Nevertheless, this rehabilitation of criminal seems far-fetched when the environment being crawling with felonies only grant opportunities for building a vast criminal network. Due to the low efficiency of prison, imprisonment just procrastinates illegal activities to lengthen the stability of society.
On the other hand, there are several reasons why education is the most optimized method to reduce the crime rate in the world. It cannot be denied that prevention is a better treatment than a cure. The likelihood of breaking the law will be diminished provided that people vastly gain access to education, especially children who barely have knowledge about illegal acts. As far as the development of children is concerned, the future of the young generation who either has the potential to lead the country or become the burden of society depends on the education system. For example, a great number of young children in their adolescence are vulnerable to expose to bad behaviors due to the lack of general knowledge about law and therefore become the object to be manipulated by a dangerous criminal. Owing to the pivotal importance of education, the government should facilitate the education system to tackle the underlying problem.
To summarize, while I have a strong opposition to the opinion that prison is a commonplace to tackle the problem of crimes, I agree with the fact that educating people may be more appropriate in dealing with an illegal offense without resort to send offenders to prison.
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- Topic: in university and school, girls tend to choose art, while boys like science. What are the reasons for this trend and do you think this tendency should be changed? 89
- in many countries imprisonment is the most common solution to crimes. However, some people believe that better education will be more effective solution. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 78
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 127, Rule ID: AGREE_WITH_THE_FACT[1]
Message: Use simply 'agree that'.
Suggestion: agree that
...lace to tackle the problem of crimes, I agree with the fact that educating people may be more appropriat...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, nevertheless, so, then, therefore, well, while, for example, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 41.998997996 155% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 8.3376753507 264% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2076.0 1615.20841683 129% => OK
No of words: 400.0 315.596192385 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94269328167 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 176.041082164 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5625 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 666.9 506.74238477 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 47.9024935561 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.4 106.682146367 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6666666667 20.7667163134 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.9879759519 276% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147483889749 0.244688304435 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0459008800237 0.084324248473 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0310133904808 0.0667982634062 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0855597470614 0.151304729494 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0302552284715 0.056905535591 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.74 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 78.4519038076 156% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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