New technologies have changed the way children spend their free time. Do Advantages of this outweigh disadvantages?
The issue of introducing new technology is one that has been debated increasingly over the past few years. At this point, some claim that the new technology is advantageous and gives various and interesting experiences for children compared to the past while there are others who are negatives. This essay will now examine both sides of the argument and end at a personal approach.
New technologies offer great advantages. To be precise, children can be enjoyable through devices and games. For example, watching video, playing the games and using a smart phone. Duo to that, most children spend the time indoor rather than outdoor and it holds that in between them. So, although they do not meet each other, they can play and enjoy on line. Moreover, they can make friends through it.
Next, new technology can save the aspect of cost. Playing activity or enjoying free time is occurred cost. But, new technology can alternative from the cost problems. For instance, VR is imaginary experience. So it is useful that they don’t need going and buying anything. They can do all of things just only watching and moving through the VR.
However, we should not overlook drawbacks as well. Firstly, they can lose time spending with the parents. Children are fascinated from more developed technologies. So they can think narrowly about the free time, so they might be able to prefer just only electronic devices.
Finally, they will be able to dangerous spending their free time only using the devices.
To conclude, there are both advantages and disadvantages of this issue. However, from my perspective, continually developed technologies have both in equal measure.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 277, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...ared to the past while there are others who are negatives. This essay will now examine ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, however, look, moreover, so, well, while, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1417.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 274.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17153284672 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69802587061 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.609489051095 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 423.0 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.2975951904 59% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.8170129655 49.4020404114 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 64.4090909091 106.682146367 60% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.4545454545 20.7667163134 60% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 4.40909090909 7.06120827912 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277037707924 0.244688304435 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0752592561613 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0587611441661 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143644430053 0.151304729494 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0279949437084 0.056905535591 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 13.0946893788 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.76 50.2224549098 135% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 11.3001002004 60% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.82 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.1190380762 67% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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