You and your colleague want to use a company room. Write a letter to your manager and ask for permission.In your letter, you should:•explain why you need that room•describe which room you need and why•tell what changes will need to be done there.

Essay topics:

You and your colleague want to use a company room. Write a letter to your manager and ask for permission.

In your letter, you should:

• explain why you need that room

• describe which room you need and why

• tell what changes will need to be done there.

Dear sir,

I am writing this letter to ask for your permission.

Next week, As I have already said. We will organise a birthday party for all the staff in our department to increase the connection between employees with each other and they can relax after work. Thus we need an empty room to organise a party because, at the party, we will do some activities and play some games, so we cannot organise in our room.

Therefore we ask for the permission on the room next to our department, where has already rebuilt last week and empty now. Firstly, the room near my department and far away from other offices, so we will not get loud noise and disturbance to other places. Secondly, we will decorate the room with flower, some word paper, balloon, and so on. However, after the party, we will remove all that.

I would be happy if you agree to my request. I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours sincerely,

Loc.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 198, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ch other and they can relax after work. Thus we need an empty room to organise a par...
^^^^
Line 13, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...o we cannot organise in our room. Therefore we ask for the permission on the room n...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 1.0 7.48453608247 13% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 4.92783505155 183% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 32.9175257732 73% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 26.3917525773 76% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 775.0 937.175257732 83% => OK
No of words: 167.0 206.0 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.64071856287 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.59483629437 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3639122916 2.54303337028 93% => OK
Unique words: 106.0 127.690721649 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.634730538922 0.622605031667 102% => OK
syllable_count: 230.4 290.88556701 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.5575402048 44.8134815571 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.4545454545 76.5299724578 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1818181818 16.8248392259 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.54545454545 4.34317383033 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219033850235 0.216113520407 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0860370790602 0.0766984524023 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0583761023578 0.0603063233224 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153250299476 0.12726935374 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0657989615223 0.0580467560999 113% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.0 8.37731958763 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 70.7449484536 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 7.45979381443 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.04 8.71597938144 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.93 7.59969072165 91% => OK
difficult_words: 27.0 41.2886597938 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 8.62886597938 104% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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