Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better for the younger people to take risk and explore new things than the older people.
Since the dawn of civilization and industrialization, the outstanding role of risk and rist taking in every individual’s life has been undeniable. Regarding the importance of the issue, a wide variety of aspects of risk has been assessed by scholars for decades. Accordingly, an unavoidable question that always has been the topic of controversy and brought about debates is whether it is better that the younger people take risk and explore new things than older people. I adhere to the idea that it is beneficial and essential for older people to take risks in their lives as well. In what follows, two conspicuous reasons will vindicate my standpoint.
The first remarkable aspect to point out is that enabling the older to feel alive and satisfied is of the main advantages of taking risks by them. It is crystal clear that people who have regular activities and avoid experiencing new ways and situations in their lives are more likely to get bored, and accordingly, disapointed and dissatisfied with life. On the other hand, it is very harmful for a society to have disapointed and mentaly negetive old population since it affects the whole society escalating the total hope and slowly makes it soluted and dipressed. The statistics revealed by a recently bublished research in my country indicate that the eldery who regularly experience new activities and environments are about 65 percent less exposed to heart attack and nervous-related diseases.
Moreover, one should take into account that not only does taking risk and exploring new things prevent the eldery from getting both mental and physical diseases themselves, but it also provide the youngers with better role models. Indeed, one’ basic attitudes and characteristic form through learning from those with whom they are mostly in touch, for example, parents. Therefore, the more up to date, energitic, and experienced parents are, the more wise and healthy children they will have due to the fact that they are more capable of enreach the next generation with invaluable intrinsic materials. In addition, it will lead the youngers to trust the olders and benefit from their practical experience since they know their parents are of a deep knowledge, which is gained from many risks that they have taken.
In conclusion, I believe that it is crutal for older people to take risks in their lives as well based on a myriad of reasons two of which were discussed above. Consequently, it is highly recommended that the older people do not be afraid of new explorations.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...It is crystal clear that people who have regular activities and avoid experiencin...
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Message: Did you mean 'provides'?
Suggestion: provides
...ysical diseases themselves, but it also provide the youngers with better role models. I...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, consequently, first, if, moreover, regarding, so, therefore, well, for example, in addition, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2135.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 418.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10765550239 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89298555115 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547846889952 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 673.2 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.3040682505 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.333333333 100.406767564 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8666666667 20.6045352989 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.93333333333 5.45110844103 182% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.334415711628 0.236089414692 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108196356645 0.076458572812 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0954459181371 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202658465367 0.150856017488 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.077026398468 0.0645574589148 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 11.7677419355 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.36 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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