In the past, shopping was a routine domestic task. Many people nowadays regard it as a hobby. To what extent do you think this is a positive trend?
Nowadays shopping has become more and more relevant in all developed countries and it is mainly viewed as a hobby. Nevertheless, this has not always been the case as far as in the past it was only an impellent necessity. It is common to think of this phenomenon as a consequence of consumerism and, I must say, it is not always seen as a positive characteristic.
In fact, it is considered that this idea of shopping as a hobby may drive people to be less aware for what it concerns the value of money. This, according to this view, might cause people to purchase useless objects that, at first, may be seen as the most amazing things in this world and that, sooner or later, will be discarded.
Right now, I cannot even realize how many times I have been in this situation but it is undeniable that it has happened too often. I can call to mind one occasion in particular. When I was eight years old, I had been whining for a long time, I think a month, because I deeply desired what I considered was the most precious and attractive toy car ever. Eventually, I obtained what I Wanted but it did not take a long time to me to become annoyed by that toy and discard it.
At that age I did not have the rational means to realize it was just a selfish desire proper of spoilt children but, growing up and thinking back to that fact, which, of course, was not an occasional event, I have become aware of the dangers of “extreme” consumerism and of what it takes to earn the money that I used to spend thus excessively.
In conclusion, it must be pointed out that shopping is not, of course, an evil of our capitalistic society, as someone can think, but, such as in every aspect of life, it is necessary to find a balance and, especially, recognize that money is earned thanks to hard work and fatigue and cannot be wasted in pointless objects as it occurs sometimes.I
- The table below gives information about student enrollments at Bristol University in 1938, 1958 and 2008.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant 95
- Some people argue that it is more important to have an enjoyable job than to earn a lot of money Others disagree and think that a good salary brings to a better life Discuss both these views and give your own opinion 77
- The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in different parts of the world Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant 79
- The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in different parts of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant 59
- In the past, shopping was a routine domestic task. Many people nowadays regard it as a hobby. To what extent do you think this is a positive trend? 70
Sentence: Nevertheless, this has not always been the case as far as in the past it was only an impellent necessity.
Error: impellent Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: At that age I did not have the rational means to realize it was just a selfish desire proper of spoilt children but, growing up and thinking back to that fact, which, of course, was not an occasional event, I have become aware of the dangers of extreme consumerism and of what it takes to earn the money that I used to spend thus excessively.
Error: spoilt Suggestion: spoil
flaws:
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 89 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 63 80
Sentence Length SD: 16.581 7.5
Read this link to understand What is sentence length SD:
http://www.testbig.com/question/questions-about-essay-e-rater
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 349 350
No. of Characters: 1472 1500
No. of Different Words: 180 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.322 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.218 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.508 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 89 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 63 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 43 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 28 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 31.727 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.581 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.818 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.383 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.707 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.118 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5