Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Advertising is the most important cause of unhealthy eating habits 3 05 3 35

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Advertising is the most important cause of unhealthy eating habits.(3:05-3:35)

Advertising plays a crucial role in people’s lives’. People have always been affected by the advertisement. Sometimes it brings new habits to people’s lives’. One of the most impressive effect that advertisement had on people was the food advertisement. Some people believe that advertising was the main reason of people unhealthy habits. I agree with this claim and I will present two reasons in convincing lines.

First and most, advertising have a huge effects on children’s eating habits. Children are one of the most influenced group of viewers. They don’t have any idea about healthy foods and they just be impressed by the cute advertising characters and colorful packages. So, they start to eat junk foods from their childhood and that will change their eating habit. Therefore, in the future, it would be so hard for them to change their wrong eating habit and they will be in danger of several diseases such as heart attack and gain weight. For example, when I was a child I always attracted to the TV programs especially food advertising. In that time, there was an animation character named Chitos bicycle who rode a bike and covey a kind of chips named Chitoos. Whenever I’ve seen this, I wanted to have Chitos chips at the time. So, it had a sharp impact on my interest in potato chips.

Second, advertising is roughly the only mean that food companies can use to show their products. Unhealthy foods are new and unknown at their first period of production but make them so famous that becomes to a eating habit. For example at the first period of Coca production, nobody knows what it is. But, after a couple of month they started advertising in a wide range from television to big banners in the road. Now Cola is one of the most favorite drinks in the word and many people drink Coca a lot by the way they know it so unhealthy. One of the most nostalgic advertising was the Michael Jackson advertising song about cola. In that time everybody knew Michel Jackson. So, Coca used his reputation to boost its customers.

In conclusion, advertising is has the most impressive effects on people unhealthy eating habits.. One reason is that, some of them are designed to seduce the children. Another reason is that advertising is the most important key to make the products famous.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: an
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...ant key to make the products famous.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, second, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, kind of, such as, by the way

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1924.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 397.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84634760705 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67146484642 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536523929471 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 588.6 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.4948584278 48.9658058833 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.0 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2692307692 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 5.45110844103 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184988401696 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.054679788721 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0551572918521 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129048136054 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.034276168864 0.0645574589148 53% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.26 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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