More children in developed countries are becoming overweight. This is a serious problem for wealthy countries.
Discuss some causes and effects of this problem. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
In recent years, the rate of obesity amongst young generation has increased alarmingly. Many well-developed nations, especially, are concerned about this issue. Although there many reasons to it, in this essay, I am going to discuss some of the major reasons such as increase in trends of fast-food culture and lack of time by parents. In addition to this, we will discuss some effects that has been noticed because of this.
There can be many explanations as why the risk of obesity is high in developed nations. First of all, in many advanced countries, parents often do not have time to prepare meal at home. This is because, most parents are working in odd and longer shifts. As a consequence, many adolescents are eating packaged food from the super-market. To illustrate this, in recent findings, American youngsters who are dealing with the obesity problems found that consumptions of pre-packaged meal are common amongst those children. While these meals may seems healthy and time-efficient, but they contains wide range of additives to improve shelve-life of the products.
On the other hand, the trend of fast-food within children is increasing globally. In many nations, the business of fast-food industy is booming. As these foods are tempting and addictive, many youngsters have replaced major meals of the day by junk foods. This caused an epidemic situation where young generations are facing issues such as obesity and high blood pressure in such an early age. For instance, in western countries, many fast-food franchises can be found doing well in their businesses and consequently health index of these countries are going down rapidly. If such practices will not stop, then it might also cause the drop down in average life expectancy.
To conclude, I would say that the lack of time by parents and the booming fast-food industries are the main reasons to blame for the problems of obesity withing youngsters and strong actions needed to be taken before the situation worsen.
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Suggestion: contain
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, may, so, then, well, while, for instance, in addition, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1683.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 327.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14678899083 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76880200279 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.584097859327 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 513.0 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.4548803788 49.4020404114 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2352941176 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.58823529412 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158590350602 0.244688304435 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0495072843045 0.084324248473 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0495424642651 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101318013057 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0426692003083 0.056905535591 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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