Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer?
In recent decade, having time together and how to spend this time together is a concern of most of the families and with advent of technology it has become a real challenge for them. A controversial question which arises here is that should parents spend their limited time with their children in fun act like games or sport or help them with their school related studies. I am of the opinion that children should have fun with their parents through games and sport. There are various reasons substantiating my stand point, two of which will be explained hereunder.
To cast light on the first issue, playing game will help parents to know their children better. It is often the case that lots of parents complain that they do not know what is going on with their kids like sometimes they do not have a clue what are they thinking or why the kids behave in evasive manner and do not take their parents seriously. Although, these parents believe that it is not an easy task to understand their kids, the kids can be easily read if they spare enough time to get themselves involve in their games. Involving themselves will be taken as if they are part of the child's friends circle, when someone is a friend of them, they will start to show their true color gradually, it is just a matter of time to know all about their thoughts, tastes, reasons behind their behavior, and all you need to know as a parent.
Regarding the second issue, physical activities can boost their health, both mentally and physically. In recent years, Social media has become undeniable part of every family and has affected mostly children in adverse manner, for they are born in this era. Because of this lots of kids became still and motionless which will make them susceptible to cholesterol and sugar related diseases. When parent allocate a part of their time to do physical exercise, they might find it fun and be encouraged to play sport with their friends too which will make them less prone to be caught in stillness diseases. Furthermore, a well-planned exercise can elevate their stress level for both parents and children, besides, it might develop the idea in both of them that they matter to each other which can positively affects their mental health.
All in all, it is always better for parents to spend a part of their free time to take part in their fun activities for not only does it make children to be known by parents better, but also makes them healthier.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, if, regarding, second, so, still, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2023.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 435.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65057471264 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37061100531 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489655172414 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 602.1 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.3830274069 48.9658058833 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.5 100.406767564 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.0714285714 20.6045352989 151% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.57142857143 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.305102693067 0.236089414692 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120602802868 0.076458572812 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0828793414501 0.0737576698707 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202581590911 0.150856017488 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0768348856035 0.0645574589148 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 11.7677419355 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.93 58.1214874552 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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