In the modern world it is no longer necessary to use animals as food or use animals in products like clothes or medicine. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is stated that the utilization of animals for food, clothes or medicine is not essential anymore in our society today. I completely agree with this viewpoint as the bio-diversity needs to be preserved and thanks to the science development, people can create products by using industrial material instead.
First, By stop hunting animals particularly wildlife ones, the bio-diversity is likely to be balanced. Since a considerable number of animals all over the world has been decreasing everyday by many illegal hunting activities, people should not make use of animals anymore. Furthermore, as the demands for products from animals rises, the disappearing of animals will continue to happen. For example, there are only 20 Red cranes in the world listed in Red List of the Worldwide Animals Organization due to uncontrolled hunting of people. If animals are still being utilized for humans purposes, they will soon become extinct leading to the endangered bio-diversity
Second, the advance technology in the industry could assist people in producing such quality products. This is because artificial products could be made just by synthetic materials but still be able to resemble products made from animals. For instance, nowadays those fox fur jackets are not created from fox anymore since clothes companies can make use of chemical substances combing with either cotton or plastic to create such gorgeous outfits without using animal fur.Therefore, by using these artificial materials instead, people can joint hands to prevent many animals from being extinct as well as preserving the wildlife.
In conclusion, the bio-environment needs to be protected and people should take advantage of those artificial materials instead of animal’s organs and body.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, second, so, still, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 7.30460921844 14% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 24.0651302605 42% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1501.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 273.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.49816849817 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92374243069 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.589743589744 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 475.2 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.2024937268 49.4020404114 162% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.1 106.682146367 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.3 20.7667163134 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.7 7.06120827912 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253012989035 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109171851076 0.084324248473 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0535007892297 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152911346016 0.151304729494 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0640133988359 0.056905535591 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 13.0946893788 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.92 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.78 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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