Which of the following is the most beneficial for young people during their spare time?
1, gaining practical work experience through part-time job or volunteering in the community
2, learning to play a sport
3, learning to play a musical instrument
There are several ways for young people to spend their spare time beneficially. While some young people earn practical work experience from part-time jobs or volunteering in the community, some choose to play a sport. Moreover, others decide to play a musical instrument. In my view, young people should make the most beneficial from experiencing by part-time job or volunteer. They can make numerous ways to think about, the stance for their future jobs, and gain money for their hobbies.
To begin with, young people will establish a lot of thinking ways from a part-time job or volunteer. In school, they often communicate with the people who are the same feeling, favorites, and major. Therefore, the bias will stack on their brain. From this point, they should convert their thinking to more flexible by other communities such as part-time jobs and volunteers because these places obtain the people who are not the same thinking with each other. As a result, young people will accomplish more bountiful ways for their thinking.
Secondly, young people will be ready for their future job by their experiences from part-time jobs or volunteers. Some people do not know how companies manage the tasks if they do not have practices in working places or local communities. For instance, in some garment shops, people brush their skills such as communication, sales, and selection for customers' cloth, and so on. The person who works in the kind of these shop for part-timers naturally holds and improves these skills for their future careers.
Finally, earning money from people by part-time jobs or volunteers will be used for spending more time on their hobbies. It is so limited for them to enjoy their hobbies because they do not have plenty of money. If they have splendid income from their part-time job or volunteer, they will be capable of obtaining new game softs, fashionable shoes or clothes, and more opportunities to hang out with their friends. Hence, their life completely will be more satisfactory by earning money.
To sum up, young people should take more time part-time jobs or volunteer for their benefit. I surely believe that they can acquire the various methods to consider, brush their skills for future jobs, and full of their hopes for their hobbies by money.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, hence, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for instance, kind of, such as, as a result, in my view, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1918.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 380.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04736842105 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55877719238 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.484210526316 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 568.8 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.8985679946 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.9 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.55 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.382491790889 0.236089414692 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.147055629428 0.076458572812 192% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0937584970361 0.0737576698707 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.258323518756 0.150856017488 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106331214255 0.0645574589148 165% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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