It has been noted over the past two years that the incidence of vandalism has steadily increased in Carlton County. At the same time, it has been noted that there is a dramatic increase in out-of-state migrants who have moved to Carlton County over the past few years. Many citizens of the county believe that these migrants are responsible for the observed increase in vandalism. We, therefore, recommend that the county government should take strict measures to reduce the number of out-of-state migrants in order to prevent further destruction of public property and restore civic order in Carlton County.
The author of the letter throws light on the increased cases of vandalism in Carlton county. He/she also states that most of the citizens of the county feel this rise is due to the increased immigrants in the county in the past two years. However, the argument is rife with false assumptions and some crucial questions need to be answered in order to reach a valid conclusion and find the solution to the stated problem.
While mentioning the increase in vandalism and out-of-state immigrants, the author fails to provide a reference to any survey or reliable data. How many cases of vandalism were reported, on an average within a certain time period in Carlton County prior to the two years mentioned? By how much have these cases increased in these two years? At the same time, how many migrants have entered the county in these two years? Can the term "dramatic increase" in the second line of the argument be quantified? These are some of the questions that need to be answered regarding the observation that many citizens of the county have made. Without these quantifications, the argument lacks a measurable basis.
Another factor that needs to be taken into consideration is the vandalism itself. What is the nature of these crimes? How many of them have been investigated thoroughly by the local police? During such investigations, how many cases can be effectively traced back to the migrants? Without answering these questions and without proper investigation, blaming the out-of-state migrants can be erroneous. The metric stated in the argument can merely be a coincidence. Another question which is crucial with this line of reasoning can be, is this increased influx of migrants advantageous to the county? The increasing migrants can very well be beneficial for the county. For instance, it can be the source of increased revenue. Therefore, reducing the number of migrants blindly, can harm the county.
Usually, vandalism is an act commited my miscreants who do not have a proper job, like teenagers and youngsters. It would be helpful to know the average age of the migrants coming in to the county. Do they contain a substantially higher number of youngsters? Why are they moving to Carlton County? If it is to earn a living, on official business then it is unlikely that they would cause a damage to public property. Furthermore, what kind of community does Carlton County have? Do the citizens of the county have a day-to-day job? Have many of them recently lost their source of livelihood which has given them time to indulge in these petty crimes and destroy public property? After all, an idle mind is a devil's workshop.
Keeping in mind all these factors, a thorough investigation is required into the acts of vandalism that have been stated in the argument. The questions regarding the number of cases of vadalism prior to the influx of migrants, investigation of these acts, the reason for the influx of migrants and their average age need to be answered before reaching a plausible conclusion. Also, the citizens and community that prospers in Carlton County needs to be scrutinized closely before blindly blaming the migrants for the vandalism.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... the solution to the stated problem. While mentioning the increase in vandali...
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...f the argument be quantified? These are some of the questions that need to be answered rega...
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...e argument lacks a measurable basis. Another factor that needs to be taken in...
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Suggestion:
...grants blindly, can harm the county. Usually, vandalism is an act commited my...
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'damage'.
Suggestion: damage
...en it is unlikely that they would cause a damage to public property. Furthermore, what k...
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Line 13, column 709, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'devils'' or 'devil's'?
Suggestion: devils'; devil's
... property? After all, an idle mind is a devils workshop. Keeping in mind all t...
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..., an idle mind is a devils workshop. Keeping in mind all these factors, a tho...
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...ommunity that prospers in Carlton County needs to be scrutinized closely before b...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, regarding, second, so, then, therefore, well, while, after all, for instance, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 28.8173652695 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 88.0 55.5748502994 158% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2683.0 2260.96107784 119% => OK
No of words: 531.0 441.139720559 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0527306968 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80035803286 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86019828246 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 204.123752495 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.446327683616 0.468620217663 95% => OK
syllable_count: 836.1 705.55239521 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.22255489022 237% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 19.7664670659 162% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.4051101027 57.8364921388 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.84375 119.503703932 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.59375 23.324526521 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.65625 5.70786347227 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287179759084 0.218282227539 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0788014643022 0.0743258471296 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0693005549331 0.0701772020484 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170669316858 0.128457276422 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0557140030901 0.0628817314937 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 14.3799401198 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.3550499002 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 98.500998004 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the solution to the stated problem. While mentioning the increase in vandali...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 525, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...f the argument be quantified? These are some of the questions that need to be answered rega...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e argument lacks a measurable basis. Another factor that needs to be taken in...
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Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...grants blindly, can harm the county. Usually, vandalism is an act commited my...
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Line 13, column 389, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'damage'.
Suggestion: damage
...en it is unlikely that they would cause a damage to public property. Furthermore, what k...
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Line 13, column 709, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'devils'' or 'devil's'?
Suggestion: devils'; devil's
... property? After all, an idle mind is a devils workshop. Keeping in mind all t...
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Line 15, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
..., an idle mind is a devils workshop. Keeping in mind all these factors, a tho...
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Line 17, column 441, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ommunity that prospers in Carlton County needs to be scrutinized closely before b...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, regarding, second, so, then, therefore, well, while, after all, for instance, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 28.8173652695 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 88.0 55.5748502994 158% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2683.0 2260.96107784 119% => OK
No of words: 531.0 441.139720559 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0527306968 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80035803286 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86019828246 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 204.123752495 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.446327683616 0.468620217663 95% => OK
syllable_count: 836.1 705.55239521 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.22255489022 237% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 19.7664670659 162% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.4051101027 57.8364921388 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.84375 119.503703932 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.59375 23.324526521 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.65625 5.70786347227 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287179759084 0.218282227539 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0788014643022 0.0743258471296 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0693005549331 0.0701772020484 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170669316858 0.128457276422 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0557140030901 0.0628817314937 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 14.3799401198 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.3550499002 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 98.500998004 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.