Some people believe it is often necessary, even desirable, for political leaders to withhold information from the public. Others believe that the public has a right to be fully informed.
Transparency amongst the leadership and the followers can create an environment of trust and mutual support. Such a positive society can progress at a faster rate as compared to the societies that lack trust in their political leaders. With this view in mind, I strongly disagree with the suggestion that it is necessary or desirable for political leaders to withhold information from the public. I believe that the people have a right to be fully informed for the following reasons.
A leader can remain in power as long as he enjoys the support of the public. The easiest way of garnering support from the public is to establish a transparent system of information exchange where the political leaders are liable to disburse all the information to the public. Such transparent systems can help curb corruption - a menace that has plagues the political systems of almost all of the countries in the world. If the political leaders are liable to pass on information to the public candidly, corruption will be checked. If the public will have access to all the information, they will be empowered to question the leadership whenever they feel that something is going haywire. This will put a pressure on the political leaders to perform their duties diligently. When the political leaders will be honest with the public, it will encourage the lower level executives to be honest as well and it will help to eradicate corruption from the grassroot levels. If the transport minister shares all the details pertaining to the tenders, their allotments, their expected revenues, their expenditures and the details of the entire ongoing project at regular intervals of time, the public will be aware of all the internal workings of the transport department. They can cross verify the details from different authorities and ask relevant questions if they find any loopholes.
One might argue that if political leaders are forced to share information, then their opponents will be empowered to foil their endeavors as well. While this may be true, we cannot ignore that sharing of information will also generate the higher number of supporters as well. If a political leader is planning to introduce a system of metro railway in a city and he shares the information regarding his proposals in public, the real estate mafia might try to influence him; his opponents might try to foil his plans by calumnious moves. However, the citizens will also stand up in support for the leader if they want metro rail to be introduced in their city.
While I strongly stand for a transparent system, there has to be some exception to it. At times, political leaders are in possession of sensitive and confidential information pertaining to national defence and security. It is in cases like these, the leaders can and should withhold the information from public. If such sensitive information is released in public, it can fall in the wrong hands and can prove to be pernicious for the nation.
- According to a recent report by our marketing department during the past year fewer people attended Super Screen produced movies than in any other year And yet the percentage of positive reviews by movie reviewers about specific Super Screen movies actual
- Some people believe it is often necessary even desirable for political leaders to withhold information from the public Others believe that the public has a right to be fully informed 50
- People s attitudes are determined more by their immediate situation or surroundings than by society as a whole 66
- The best way to teach is to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones 50
- According to a recent report by our marketing department during the past year fewer people attended Super Screen produced movies than in any other year And yet the percentage of positive reviews by movie reviewers about specific Super Screen movies actual 90
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 388, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...plagues the political systems of almost all of the countries in the world. If the politica...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, regarding, so, then, well, while, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 25.0 12.4196629213 201% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 58.6224719101 114% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2486.0 2235.4752809 111% => OK
No of words: 496.0 442.535393258 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01209677419 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71922212354 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80939067689 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.451612903226 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 772.2 704.065955056 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.3589810243 60.3974514979 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.380952381 118.986275619 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.619047619 23.4991977007 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.21951772744 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.384720295575 0.243740707755 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131755443275 0.0831039109588 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109211601935 0.0758088955206 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.257713593273 0.150359130593 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0794826427518 0.0667264976115 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.1392134831 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 100.480337079 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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