As a student of university that has a long break between university semesters, the university requires all students to do one of the following for one month during the break:
• Take a course on the subject that has no direct connection to their majors of study
• Work as a volunteer to improve some aspects of life of the city or their home town.
Which one do you think is more beneficial for students in their university? Why?
In today's modern and sophisticated world, universities' requirements play a vital role in students' success. In this connection, learners should fulfill several requirements during a break. Although some people believe that taking a course on the topic which is not connected with pupil's major field is highly beneficial, many others hold the view that it is efficient for students to enhance some facets of life in their town. I agree with the second group notion, and I will analyze my reasons throughout this essay.
First, students can have a wonderful job opportunity in the future if they work as a volunteer for improving their city during a semester. To be more specific, when one wants to apply for a job, it is a crucial factor for an interviewer whether they have worked in the past or not. Thus, people who have a job experience can find a satisfying career in the future readily. According to my own experience, when I was a university student, I performed all my projects wonderfully, and I passed all courses with high grades; however, I have not job experiences. Accordingly, when I have applied for tasks, managers have not accepted me as I did not have a resume in working places, but my other friends with a lower grade than me found a vacancy after graduation because they worked during semesters' break.
Second, working in a break has a significant consequence for students and makes them independent in the future. To elucidate, at university, learners just reading their material in the books which do not provide insight into their non-academic life. After graduating from university, they face a host of challenges in their lives, which are difficult for them to solve independently. However, if students figure out real-life obstacles during semesters, they will become familiar with problems. For example, my sister participated in the project treating poor families who could not afford treatment expenses, such as vaccine injection. As she has learned how to inject, she could treat herself by injecting serum when her blood pressure was low, and there was nobody to rescue her.
To conclude, while there are several arguments on each side, I profoundly believe that it is helpful for learners to work on improving their city aspects during a semester. Not only does working provide job experience for students, but it also helps them to meet their demands without others.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 543, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'jobbed'.
Suggestion: jobbed
...s with high grades; however, I have not job experiences. Accordingly, when I have a...
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Line 7, column 294, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...m to meet their demands without others.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, however, if, second, so, thus, while, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2010.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 399.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03759398496 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82442685809 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581453634085 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 626.4 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.5708885403 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.235294118 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4705882353 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.23529411765 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240189414925 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0732493268457 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0528863372756 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137566337002 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0568245249992 0.0645574589148 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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