Some parents think that childcare centres provide the best services
for children of pre-school age. Other working parents think that family
members such as grandparents will be better caregivers for their
young children.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Working parents hold that childcare centres better care in pre-school children; however, others argue that these children need to be supervised by their relatives, such as grandparents. While parents sufficient amount of money to take care of their kids in these centres, I believe that care and upbringing done by the child's related family people are much preferable.
On the one hand, parents opt that daycare centres provide better services because they are being paid for this care and supervision. They professionally make them bathe, feed them when hungry and make them sleep because they are well-trained. For instance, recent research conducted by Oxford University revealed that 33% of working mothers and fathers, these days, are preferring to leave their young children in childcare centres because they keep them neat and soothe them until they return from their jobs. However, I believe that daycare services lack in personal care and affection, which is otherwise received through their grandparents.
On the other hand, young children are more comfortable with their grandmothers, either paternal or maternal, because they are related to them by blood. This is to say that they not only instil in them different etiquettes of life but also teach them their culture and traditions in a caring and loving environment. This is supported by a recent survey conducted by Delhi University, in which they claim that as Indian parents increasingly leave their pre-school children with their grandparents, the levels of comfort has risen sharply and that, inevitably, they are becoming well-groomed in the long run. Therefore, I believe that toddlers, who are not yet ready to set-off to school, should be taken care of by close relatives, especially grandparents, because they are well-nurtured under their own relative's influence.
In conclusion, although daycare centres are paid to take care of pre-schoolers, I believe that relatives, including grandparents, must be given the responsibility to care for these children as they are closely related to them. It is recommended that every working parent should prefer leaving their pre-school kids with their grandparents rather than childcare service centres.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 367, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...orking mothers and fathers, these days, are preferring to leave their young children in childc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, therefore, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 56.0 24.0651302605 233% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1892.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 340.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.56470588235 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08921553071 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532352941176 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 564.3 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.8516480713 49.4020404114 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 157.666666667 106.682146367 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.3333333333 20.7667163134 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.91666666667 7.06120827912 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253267893613 0.244688304435 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117400545346 0.084324248473 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0926634182986 0.0667982634062 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193849407098 0.151304729494 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0548324416733 0.056905535591 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.9 13.0946893788 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 50.2224549098 69% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.26 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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