Studies suggest that many teenagers these days prefer socialising online to meeting one another in person.
Why do you think this is the case?
What measures could be taken to encourage teenagers to spend more time meeting one another in person?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
It is claimed that more and more young people are interested in meeting other people online rather than face-to-face. There are several reasons for this and also advices are given to change this situation.
It is inevitable that there are certain causes of increasing online communicating for the case of globalization and the convenience it brings. Firstly, due to the development of the world along with the dramatically growth of technology, people literally do everything on the internet namely communicating, sending files or information, taking pictures and so on. As a result, the young generation is required to update daily to catch up with the latest trend as they are on behalf of their countries in international competitions or meetings and they are responsible for the face of their motherland. Secondly, the most crucial reason why the youngsters choose socializing online is that they can benefit from the convenience of the internet. With facebook, instagram, zoom and so on, all the meetings or chitchats are now available online and they are all free. Therefore, more and more teenagers utilize the social network for communicating as they can meet each other anytime, anywhere and as many people as they want to at the same time without wasting time traveling around, in addition, meeting another one in person can lead to some extra fees such as drinking, fuels-related fees and so on.
However, this trend emerges some detrimental impact on young generation because meeting another one online can make people come up with some diseases like obesity or even harm their eyes. Or even worst, they may soon forget how to talk to each other when they meeting face-to-face. That is why some solutions are suggested to this problem. Firstly, adults should raise the important of communicating directly to their children. As teenagers still rely on their parents, they are forced to obey their requirement, which leads to the process of encouraging children to meet others in person is easier. Secondly, the government may consider force the gigantic tech corporations like twitter or facebook to impose a fee for video call or chatting in order to limit the frequency of teens use the call. Because not many family are wealthy enough to pay daily or monthly for such a fee like that, the youngsters under the pressure of their family are no other choice than meeting directly.
As things considered, there are two prime reasons why young people tend to meet online is for not being an outdated ones and the convenience of this communicating method. Nevertheless, there are some issues to this development, which occurred some measures to be taken such as the education of adults about how vital it is to have a face-to-face meeting and also the intervention of the government to require the the social network company to strain the accessing of teenagers in terms of socializing online.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 663, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to socialize'.
Suggestion: to socialize
...rucial reason why the youngsters choose socializing online is that they can benefit from th...
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Line 5, column 811, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun family seems to be countable; consider using: 'many families'.
Suggestion: many families
...ency of teens use the call. Because not many family are wealthy enough to pay daily or mont...
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Line 7, column 410, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...tervention of the government to require the the social network company to strain the ac...
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Line 7, column 410, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...tervention of the government to require the the social network company to strain the ac...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, in addition, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 13.1623246493 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 10.4138276553 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 41.998997996 164% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2431.0 1615.20841683 151% => OK
No of words: 480.0 315.596192385 152% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06458333333 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68069463864 4.20363070211 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85782839928 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 176.041082164 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491666666667 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 781.2 506.74238477 154% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 77.7833474141 49.4020404114 157% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.0 106.682146367 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.2352941176 20.7667163134 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.23529411765 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248279265195 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0782022948501 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0585709541191 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159805211373 0.151304729494 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0261123069052 0.056905535591 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.0946893788 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 78.4519038076 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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