Agree or disagree? People should have hobbies and other physical activities which are different from their jobs,
The question of whether people should have hobbies and do physical activities which are different from their own job has been debated for many years. A wide range of human prefer to don’t have other physical activities behind their occupation since they feel it is an obsession for them. I, however, adhere to the concept that people should have both entertainment and other corporal activities behind their jobs. In the essay that follows, two conspicuous reasons will vindicate my standpoint.
To begin with, nowadays, a lot of folk in the world are suffering disease which derive from sedentary life. One of the issues that hectic life generated for the people is an obesity. From my perspective, if the mankind have had a physical activities, they couldn’t have had obesity.
A past experience of my uncle conserve as a defense for my claim.
My uncle was a boss at an automobile plant who worked between 8 to 10 hour a day. Before coming to his home, he always go to gym to exercise and having corporal activities. Other staffs didn’t exercise and at most of the suffering obesity, but my uncle wouldn’t have such a related diseases and that was because of exercise.
Furthermore, there are some who argue that just concentrating only on your work and earning money without having any hobbies can bring you a lot of joy. I feel, this is a miss- guiding idea. Compiling money and focusing only on your job without conducting any hobbies can terminate a lot of anxiety and sadness. I feel my own experience is a compelling example for what I mean. As I took my first job which was with high salary, I decided to focus only on my occupation. Other staffs always told me to come to amusement park and go to a swimming pool every weekend, but I rejected them. In my leisure time I studied articles which were related to my job. Finally I couldn’t do my job as well as I imagined. That’s all because of not having a good hobbies which can bring me mirth to my life and also help me to conduct my jobs as well as possible.
In conclusion, I subscribe to the idea that having neither physical activities nor hobbies which are different from your job can be good for us. This is because without them we suffer disease such as obesity and couldn’t do our works well because of lack of joy in our life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Whether; The question whether
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...ive, if the mankind have had a physical activities, they couldn’t have had obesity. A pas...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, so, well, i feel, i mean, in conclusion, such as, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1902.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 414.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59420289855 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61335690199 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512077294686 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 606.6 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.8645549245 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.4545454545 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8181818182 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.81818181818 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.339094364731 0.236089414692 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0994019785149 0.076458572812 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.122306957312 0.0737576698707 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17428886142 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.150687268211 0.0645574589148 233% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.31 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.