Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
By and large, it is established beyond doubt that with the dawn in human civilization, technology has revolutionized the world. It is often being said that technology is a double edge sword, if fire can cook your food, it can burn hands too. In this regard, the right use of recreational technology is of paramount importance. Ther are different schools of thought among scholars. where some reckon that technologies such as televisions and movies provide entertainment to the people, other contemplate that damages associated with such entertainments outweigh their benefits. As for this writer's opinion, I would champion to the notion that television has adversely affect our young generation. In what follows, I will delve into most crucial reasons to substantiate my viewpoints.
The first compelling reason corroborating my stance is associated with the idea that Tv has provided youngsters with many negative role models. for instance Villion character. It is natural tendency of children in a young age to attract to evil, therefore they got influenced by billion character and try to imitate the actions in their real life.It is obvious that they stopped respecting their elders, try to misbahve and unfortunately, eventually delves into crimes. To be more specific, this is specifically true for children who belong to poor or middle-class families but in order to copy the lavish life style of role models they start to do robbery or other small crimes. By way of illustration, My cousin was extremely obedient child and excellent in studies before his he developed the habit of watching and getting inspired from tV caharcters. BUT soon after few year of following nagtive role models he started to steal his parents' money in order to fulfil his needs. Hasd not he watche the Tv, he would not have established bad behavior.
The second rationale behind my opinion is rooted in the fact that Tv acts like addiction and ruins the personalities of young adults especially when sexual contents are displayed on the tv and profanity is used by the Actors. To be more specific, it is obvious that tv media want to get the high rating of their shows for that they include the such censored scene that have immenly wrong impacts on youngsters brains.Due to exposure to such explicit scenes at young age their interest is developed towards sexuality.My opinion on this is greatly profound by myson's example. Last year my cousins son started to involve in sexual activities because of watching such movies.As a result he was kicked out of school.My example clearly manifests that sexual exposure at an early age is immensely detrimental for young adults development
By perusing the above paragraphs, one can infer that television and movies deteriorate the society structure and especially influences the young adult's behavior. For the sake of brevity, few points are worth reiterating. First, there is increased disobedience and crime ratio because of negative role models provided by media.Second, Tv Broadcasts contents that have extremely hazardous effect on young adults personalities. As for writer's opinion, I would vehemently urge parents lo limit the young generation's television exposure and monitor their activities on tv, if not encourage them to watch educational programs only.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, therefore, as for, for instance, such as, as a result, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2767.0 1977.66487455 140% => OK
No of words: 530.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22075471698 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79809637944 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93956511679 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 297.0 212.727598566 140% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560377358491 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 863.1 618.680645161 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 99.0220177536 48.9658058833 202% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 138.35 100.406767564 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5 20.6045352989 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.75 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.5376344086 343% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.115705937401 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0281006626462 0.076458572812 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.039075242023 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0770253219463 0.150856017488 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0517855330443 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.39 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 150.0 86.8835125448 173% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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