You have recently visited a local school in your community. It needs people who can help renovate the building and also other jobs. Write a letter to the principal of the school and say:
- how would you be able to help
- when and why would you do it
- who will help you to do it
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing this in connection with a renovation in your school that needs volunteers to help. As I recently came to your place last weekend, I would like to offer you my work free of charge.
From what I saw, it seems that the renovated building has no one to clean the floor up after the builders leaving at the end of the day, so I think I can be able to help with cleaning and pick up some garbages around the school playground. I could also help with repainting windows and doors because I have been painting my furniture for a very long time to remove mould and discolouration.
Since I am working as a full-time accountant, it would be best if I could complete the work at the weekends if that suits you. My daughter and my nieces all went through your school so this is my pleasure to give you a hand.
My boyfriend is a builder so he would be a perfect fit for this job as well. He is highly qualified and experienced, but you already had other volunteers, we would still be grateful to give extra hands.
If you feel that my services are valuable, please contact us on the phone number below. I look forward to helping bring this incredible school back to our local neighbourhoods.
Yours faithfully,
Elsa Hoang
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...till be grateful to give extra hands If you feel that my services are valuable ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, so, still, well, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 32.9175257732 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 26.3917525773 110% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1013.0 937.175257732 108% => OK
No of words: 232.0 206.0 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.36637931034 4.54256449028 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.90276135726 3.78020617076 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51632231096 2.54303337028 99% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 127.690721649 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.625 0.622605031667 100% => OK
syllable_count: 302.4 290.88556701 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.13402061856 33% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 12.6804123711 8% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 232.0 16.3608247423 1418% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 44.8134815571 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1013.0 76.5299724578 1324% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 232.0 16.8248392259 1379% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 45.0 4.34317383033 1036% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 7.41237113402 13% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.309445498931 0.216113520407 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.309445498931 0.0766984524023 403% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0603063233224 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170179331259 0.12726935374 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0493675952257 0.0580467560999 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 115.2 8.37731958763 1375% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -138.62 70.7449484536 -196% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 3.82989690722 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 90.2 7.45979381443 1209% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 9.55 8.71597938144 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 17.39 7.59969072165 229% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 33.0 41.2886597938 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 53.0 8.62886597938 614% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 94.8 8.54432989691 1110% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 95.0 8.15463917526 1165% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.