Movies and television programs should present stories in which good people are rewarded and bad people are punished.
It goes without saying that media are the most important part of our lives. There has been a controversial debate among people watching movies as to whether televisions must show programs presenting stories in which good people are admired and evil people are punished. From my perspective, showing these kinds of movies are more beneficial, and two reasons to support my view are elaborated upon hereunder.
To begin with, producing movies and programs having quality content, rewarding good people and punishing bad people, country can take the advantage of healthy people. It is not a secret to anyone that media and social network have great and profound impacts on people pursuing their programs, so it is crucial that movies contain good content. Culture and moral principles are being created and translated through different kinds of movies; children as the next generation are under the influence of stories presented in TV, when good individuals are rewarded and evil people end up with bad fate, children will definitely learn to be kind and good people during their lives because they are sure that justice exist for all people being criminals or ordinary. Therefor the precious source of every community, kids, will be more likely to turn into helper and kind individuals since they are aware of the consequences of committing offences. As a result new generation is able to create a better world for human being since they have learnt to be good people and how to distinguish good from evil.
Furthermore, showing stories and programs in which people receive the result being good or bad of their actions and performances, producers will make people who are satisfied with the living. It is crystal clear that humans are being considered as emotional creatures and every story stimulate their feelings; although we are aware that stories shown in TV or other kinds of media are not totally true, we feel happy, unhappy, and angry during and after movies and it is a sign that we should be careful about the content of every program that we are interested in watching. To put it in more vivid picture, when I was a university student, I was use to watching Korean movies all the time, and I remember one of the movies was not happy ending and offenders had not been arrested, so I was depressed for a week and I lost my hope to the world. Had I watched a happy ending movie, I would not have been depressed for a week. Thus, movies should be produced in quality content in order to make people happy and satisfied with the living.
In sum, not only will people take the advantage of living in a peaceful world, they will also be more happy and satisfied with the life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 144, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...ial debate among people watching movies as to whether televisions must show programs presenti...
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Line 3, column 648, Rule ID: BE_USE_TO_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
... when I was a university student, I was use to watching Korean movies all the time,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, so, thus, as to, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 38.0 13.1623246493 289% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 10.4138276553 250% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 24.0651302605 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 41.998997996 136% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2224.0 1615.20841683 138% => OK
No of words: 463.0 315.596192385 147% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80345572354 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.20363070211 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50952033204 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 176.041082164 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494600431965 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 701.1 506.74238477 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 33.0 20.2975951904 163% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 97.5950870711 49.4020404114 198% => OK
Chars per sentence: 158.857142857 106.682146367 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.0714285714 20.7667163134 159% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.71428571429 7.06120827912 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.403806156727 0.244688304435 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.142068885388 0.084324248473 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.140457174473 0.0667982634062 210% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232784970139 0.151304729494 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10425081707 0.056905535591 183% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 13.0946893788 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.44 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.1190380762 150% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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