Some people say that devoting one's time to family activities is more important than spending time working. Others believe that dedicatingnone's time to work is more important.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion
Both jobs and families are spent most time, especially by the young nowadays. While some people argue that devoting time on their work is more important, it is obvious that we should prioritize our families instead of working.
On the one hand, working is extremely crucial for a family's financial wellbeing. This is because workers have to be responsible for ensuring the relationship between members in family. If the economic situation is not good enough, it can lead to some serious problems. To illustrate, many couples decided to divorce due to they had difficulty on paying the school fees for their children. Money is becoming one of the major factors of argument in families, so spending time on earning living is esential and should be concentrated.
On the other hand, sharing time with family is more valuable as it contributes to people's happiness and good mental health. Encountering difficulties is undeniable in every career, but their families will always support them a lot. The members are able to help tackle their problems, or even just stay by their sides and encourage them to overcome hurdles. Moreover, dedicating time with family is often fun and relaxing, while it is stressful at work. A good example of this is that most of Asian workers chose their top priority was to stay with their families, while many agreed that they did not eant to spending much time at offices, according to a recent survey.
To conclude, while time used for working is necessary, it is apparent that human beings should take more time to enjoy with families.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 83, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'people'.
Suggestion: people
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, so, well, while, as to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1308.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 264.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95454545455 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62719364811 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.598484848485 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 409.5 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.4961453028 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.615384615 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3076923077 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.61538461538 7.06120827912 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276486714579 0.244688304435 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103931693041 0.084324248473 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0888756435597 0.0667982634062 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197559539764 0.151304729494 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0716526895468 0.056905535591 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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