Universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student's field of study.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Students pick their field of study either because they are passionate about that stream or because it promises the most lucrative job offers in future. In both cases, students focus all their attention on subjects limited to their field. How can a student be confident that their interest will forever be limited only to their field of study or that jobs related to courses outside their field of study will not land them lucrative jobs? This prompt recommends that universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside their field of study. In my opinion, I mostly agree with this suggestion and argue that every student should be exposed to the plethora of courses available outside of their field of study so that they can make the best use of it, for two reasons.
A parochial outlook in curating course work for students does not give them adequate exposure to the different courses on offer. They remain myopic in their outlook, fail to identify where their passion truly lies and just follow set norms not realising that each individual is unique. In India, until very recently, students were required to pick one out of three fields of study- science, commerce and the arts. Once that choice was made, there was no looking back and taking additional courses was not the norm. This lead to the creation of two groups of people. The first were fortunate enough to like what they did and believed that they had found their true calling. However, second group abhorred what they had pursued but were helpless because they didn’t know where their passion lay. Had these people been exposed to courses outside of their field of study, they could have made a more informed decision. For example, a person, while studying to become a doctor could have dabbled in one or two languages or an individual working to become an MBA graduate could have taken a few science courses, may be to gain some extra knowledge or perhaps even abandon his current field and follow his passion. This example underscores the importance of taking up varied courses to help students gain a good insight into where their interest truly lies.
There are several universities that offer diverse courses. For example, a certain university has its own Quidditch team. If students are given the opportunity to try their hand at this game, they may start to enjoy it and before we know it, it may be one of the game played at the Olympics with these students representing their respective countries. It is far more beneficial for universities to require students to try their hand at different courses than to stick to one filed. Just imagine a student reluctantly doing his math homework everyday when he has the talent to be the world’s best Quidditch player and doesn’t even know about it because never got the chance to develop his skill.
Some people may argue that one must focus all their attention on the task at hand rather than dabbling in different courses so be able to imbibe the maximum possible information fom that specific field. But what if someone is a pro at multitasking and can and wants to gain information from diverse fields? Shouldn’t they be encouraged? It is imperative that universities offer their students diverse courses so that the students may use them to the best of their advantage.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
... promises the most lucrative job offers in future. In both cases, students focus all thei...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t into where their interest truly lies. There are several universities that offe...
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Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...ent reluctantly doing his math homework everyday when he has the talent to be the world’...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, may, second, so, while, for example, of course, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 71.0 33.0505617978 215% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 58.6224719101 126% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2760.0 2235.4752809 123% => OK
No of words: 569.0 442.535393258 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85061511424 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88402711743 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43718976161 2.79657885939 87% => OK
Unique words: 279.0 215.323595506 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490333919156 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 852.3 704.065955056 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.2406703183 60.3974514979 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.0 118.986275619 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7083333333 23.4991977007 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.83333333333 5.21951772744 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222635618835 0.243740707755 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0776113113381 0.0831039109588 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0717309963008 0.0758088955206 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155344699177 0.150359130593 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0630350341842 0.0667264976115 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.1392134831 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 100.480337079 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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