Young people are now spending more and more time and money following fashion trends. Is this a positive or negative development?
Nowadays, the amount of young generation’s money and time spent on fashion has been increasing dramatically. Whether our world is beneficial from this development has generated dissenting ideas among people. In my opinion, fashion trends bring many positive impacts not only for its fans but also for our economy.
As a supporter of fashion trends, I believe that there are several convincing arguments of shopping clothes. First of all, young adults have to suffer from increasingly high pressure and stress from working so that they could earn more money to support themselves and their family financially. Therefore, they regard shopping clothes, which can help them relax after hard-working days, as an interesting entertainment option. This results in the fact that they can be motivated to work more effectively. Secondly, becoming fashionable is also associated with the confidence of young generation, which plays an important role of success. If they find more confident, they can communicate better and receive more opportunities in their life. For instance, some research proves that candidates wearing formal suits have higher chance to receive offer in recruitment.
Consumption of clothes also is of great importance in economic growth. Money spent by young people in order to follow fashion trends help many fashion companies have higher income and revenue. Therefore, they have to pay more tax, leading to the fact that governments have larger budgets to channel in build better infrastructure which can increase their citizens’ living standard.
In conclusion, I once reaffirm my position that young generation and the economy benefit from fashion trends. I believe that in the foreseen future, more people will have a right awareness of this situation.
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- Young people are now spending more and more time and money following fashion trends Is this a positive or negative development 73
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1511.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 275.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.49454545455 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88814275877 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.625454545455 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 459.0 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.0663201644 49.4020404114 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.733333333 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3333333333 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.306482812314 0.244688304435 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0957102992842 0.084324248473 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0708625268803 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190704865896 0.151304729494 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0238523016025 0.056905535591 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.56 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.07 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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