The following appeared in an editorial in a business magazine.
"Although the sales of Whirlwind video games have declined over the past two years, a recent survey of video-game players suggests that this sales trend is about to be reversed. The survey asked video-game players what features they thought were most important in a video game. According to the survey, players prefer games that provide lifelike graphics, which require the most up-to-date computers. Whirlwind has just introduced several such games with an extensive advertising campaign directed at people ten to twenty-five years old, the age-group most likely to play video games. It follows, then, that the sales of Whirlwind video games are likely to increase dramatically in the next few months."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
While it might be true that sales of Whirlwind video games will increase in the next few months; however, the author's argument does not make a cogent sense. It is easy to understand that lifelike graphics video games might be popular to twenty-five years old video gamers, but this argument is rife with holes and assumptions therefor, not strong enough to lead to introduce several such games in market.
The author mentions that Whirlwind video games did not have enough sales in past two years, but the author does not talk about reasons for declined sale. For example, the game's price might be expensive which can be the main explanation for declined sale. On the other hand, the quality of the game might not be attractive enough to players. To strengthen his or her suggestion the author needs investigations about the reasons of declined sale.
Additionally, the author implies that the survey's result shows that players prefer lifelike graphics video games; however, there is not enough information about the survey. Imagine just few young boys who answered the survey's questions which can make a different perspective. Moreover, the author indicates that the lifelike graphics requires the most up-to-date computers which can be a reason for the company to not have enough sale. Video game players who do not have the most up-to-date computes available are not going to buy such a game.
The author indicates that Whirlwind has an extensive advertising for twenty-five years old group. However, there are other age groups such as high-school age or over thirty years old group who are interested to buy such a game too. On the other hand, the author mentions that introduction new version of such a video game is going to increase the sales in the next few months which is not a strong assumption. It may take more time for buyers to get familiar with the new version of video game or to buy the updated computer.
The author's suggestion is persuasive when he or she gathers information about the survey's sample group and the age of video game buyers. After answering these questions, the author can make such a conclusion.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 111, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...se in the next few months; however, the authors argument does not make a cogent sense. ...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 5, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...e or to buy the updated computer. The authors suggestion is persuasive when he or she...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, while, for example, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 55.5748502994 67% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1776.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 361.0 441.139720559 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91966759003 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56721701515 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 204.123752495 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.448753462604 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 548.1 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.9002749845 57.8364921388 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.0 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5625 23.324526521 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5625 5.70786347227 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.360788644267 0.218282227539 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130233831617 0.0743258471296 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0712542707712 0.0701772020484 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212697525301 0.128457276422 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0578484678052 0.0628817314937 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 98.500998004 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 12.3882235529 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 111, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...se in the next few months; however, the authors argument does not make a cogent sense. ...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 5, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...e or to buy the updated computer. The authors suggestion is persuasive when he or she...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, while, for example, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 55.5748502994 67% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1776.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 361.0 441.139720559 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91966759003 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56721701515 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 204.123752495 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.448753462604 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 548.1 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.9002749845 57.8364921388 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.0 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5625 23.324526521 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5625 5.70786347227 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.360788644267 0.218282227539 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130233831617 0.0743258471296 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0712542707712 0.0701772020484 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212697525301 0.128457276422 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0578484678052 0.0628817314937 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 98.500998004 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 12.3882235529 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.