A gift (such as a camera, a soccer ball, or an animal) can contribute to a child’s development. What gift would you give to help a child develop? Why? Use reasons and specific examples to support your choice
A gift given to a child can impact a lot the child’s development. The traditional toys provide the interaction between the children besides a computer or a video game. As my grandmother was used to say, knowledge is the best gift as we can receive but it not the preference of the major of children, so I still believe in an old-style toy.
Nowadays the technology are so developed that we have many kinds of video games that you can play with a friend who is in the other side of the planet and you can talk easily with any part of the world only tipping in your iPhone or notebook. But this kind of virtual interaction is not as strong as a face to face conversation.
A book brings to a child knowledge and intellectual development for all lifelong. The imagination improves which is an important skill for any child. They also can learn about a different culture or language but it is known that the most of child would not prefer this kind of gift.
On the other hand, there are many traditional toys that can contribute to development of intellectual of the children and is considered as a cool thing by all of them. To the calm ones, a puzzle gives analytic and strategic knowledge. For the children who have much energy to waste, a ball is a good idea to provide fun and real interaction with other children.
In conclusion, a gift can influence a lot in a child development. Currently, there are many options for us to choose but I believe that the old-style toys are the best choice for not disappoint the children and also contribute for their development.
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